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Every day
i seem to change.
The light starts to fade away.
I think of my past, so bright,
but know darkness is enclosing.
Everything and everyone i love and ever did
always seems to quickly drift away in the end.
- by lonlygreenbubblefairy |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/18/2008 |
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Comments (3 Comments)
- aL ycious - 02/01/2009
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This is a good length for a poem; I don't know why people think that a piece has to be 40 lines long to be decent. Jeez.
Also, I don't totally get 'how you really feel', because all I know is that darkness is enclosing, and that your childhood was filled with bright lights and reflective surfaces. Elaborate.
Here's a line that used to really help me out when I was writing (though it's definitely on the cheesy and uber-simple side of things :3 ): Show, don't tell. - Report As Spam
- Missmarypop - 12/25/2008
- Yeah er very short but still try more poems! Expressing ur feelings in poetry is a great thing! Write more!
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- xXzae234Xx - 08/27/2008
- YESH FIRST i love the poem but its a little to shirt and everything
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