Blue Thought

• Artist: DHz
• Description: Its the lyrics to a song im trying to finish writing
• Date: 08/08/2008
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I'm having trouble trying to sleep..... (tonight).
I close my eyes and I count sheep.....(tonight).
I twist and turn inside my bed, cant seem to getchu' out my head.
I'm having trouble trying to sleep...... (tonight).

I'm swimming in a sea of blue.....(tonight).
All of a sudden i see you.......(tonight).
I stumble on to get ahead and then *bass drum* im out my bed....(tonight)
Oh my cant you leave me to sleep....(tonight)

Thats as far as ive got C&C please?

Comments

[Takashi Kyo]

if it is a song then try reworking the lyrics a bit. also in the description you should probably add a guide to reading the lyrics. other then that it isn't bad.

[Vampires Wews-]

Its really good

[Slinginator]

it has potential

just work on it more lol

[Only Becca]

Song, eh?
Erm, I think you'll need a chorus, and some better lines.

Oh - and /don't/ include your instrument solos/whatever in your lyrics. Please.