The Storm.

• Artist: .the.nerd.herd.
• Description: Please comment. <3
  
• Date: 07/22/2008
• Tags: thestorm

The storm raged outside.
The freezing snow was isolating her from the rest of the world. She began to shiver as the lights flickered on and off, and looking into the mirror she noticed her lips were slowly turning blue.
The storm continued outside with brutal force, and then...the power went out.
The young woman collapsed to the ground and her limbs gradually began to freeze.
Slowly she looked down upon her freezing body.
The world had always been cold and dark to her, and now it was finally taking its toll on her soul.
The cold reached her chest and her heart beat began to decrease steadily.
The storm continued raging as the woman realized, nothing could melt her heart.
And as her eyes closed one last time, the storm ceased.

Comments

[jsonnia_94]

4/5

[Long~Lost~Dream]

That is good. =]
Uhhh I did see a rough spot with "toll on her soul"
Other than that I thought it was good. Sad ending, nothing of what I was expecting actually but it was great. =] 5 stars

[Sincerely Metalhead]

hey thats pretty good! 5 stars!

[.bubble.gumm.]

I completely understand the pain and slightly metaphoric quality. It's good. To me at least.

[LadiieLove.]

I enjoyed it.

[HUMIDIFIER]

it's a cold little scene...the font choice and color are both obstrusive. it's not supposed to matter if your content is good, but your content isn't that great, and making it hard to read is irritating. i'm not a fan of the style or the diction, and the metaphor is agonizing. it seems like a few lines out of a book that were split up by line breaks, nothing more.