My Last Words

• Artist: Folset
• Description: Here is one of my poems I've written in the past. Hope you like it!
• Date: 07/18/2008
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Moving away from all of you,
You and all of your haye.

Leaving without notce is what you want,
After all that I've done for you,
Stealing my friends for nothing,
To crush my hope and love

Without notice I'll leave,
Odd that I even care,
Reaching for the doorway,
Dreaming of the other side,
Stepping into my everlasting twilight.

Comments

[Deadlylight6]

@ torn mind: who cares if its cliche, i dont. why? well if ppl like u who think something is cliche can actually think, ud know that all of our words in english, spanish or watever language it may be is itself cliched. the only thing, no, the only time when nothing was cliched was when words were first created, sentences formed and grammar came to. so up urs to all who says something is cliched when u urself is also cliched.

[darkangel9194]

i don't care about the spelling errors or if it was childish. i think it was great! 5/5

[power dude13]

wow pretty good. c if u can check out my entry if u can.

[cute_kilala]

It is pretty well done. Good Job.

[xVxparamore_loverxVx]

check your spelling and it was kinda crapy

[Folset]

it was when I was a child, that I wrote it.

[Broken_Soul_Torn_Mind]

Not great. The anger felt is oddly childish, and there's some spelling errors. And "everlasting twilight" is kind of cliche.