Fly No More

• Artist: Mokoni
• Description: Have you ever felt like you were lifted off by someone, and fell in love? Did you realize in the long run you couldn't stay with them due to the pain? You have to ask them to let you go, no matter how hard it is, for both of you. That's what this poem is about.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: care fear reality

Put me down,
I’m begging you,
Please.

Climb down from the clouds,
Feet on earth,
Reality.

I don’t want to hurt anyone,
Because I know how it feels,
Painful.

Despite my feelings,
And all my care,
Fearful.

So, I’m begging you,
Please,
Set me down from the clouds
To face the cold, dark reality.

Comments

[filipinoinlove123]

Hmmmm, short and sweet, awesome!
<3
Vote on mine please!
http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=101071357

[musicbyme]

sad poem. i like it. keep on writing . i hope to hear more from u. a 4 4 me

[Toastbusters]

Watch the double-run of "feels" and "feelings" in the third and fourth stanza; something about it is really incongruous to your flow - find a synonym to 'feels' and it should free things up.
Other than that - it's got a lot of potential. Just edit and re-edit and re-edit some more until it's so refined and sharp that it cuts hard. You'll get there, and likely, you'll write new pieces as a launch point.

[Vampirebloodlust101]

awesome! (but so very true) :[