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Morning breaks
I'm out of bed
The morning sun
Its hot sunlight shining at my head
Notice the silhouette behind me
Sometimes warms my mood
Another perfect day
Means spiritual food
Every day is hotter
Days are rarely cold
What should I do right now?
The break will still unfold
Not hidden in the shadows
Enjoy the perfect scene
I need more than a walk
The sun makes the grass really green
Not even close to noon yet
I'm still awakened from heat
Everyone must be at the beach surfing
As I have my own plans to meet
Walking in the fields of green
The sun is at my feet
This broad sunlight remains to be unseen
As my skin still builds up the rays of heat.
The beach is the best place for me
I'm not always alone
My back is always prone
But all this light is dazzling for me to see
Looking back as sunset begins
My mind shall not bend
For as everything that I've seen today
It won't be the beginning of an end.
- by Mario the Davidic Hero |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/09/2010 |
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- Title: The sun
- Artist: Mario the Davidic Hero
- Description: It usually reflects on my day-to-day progresses taking place in the summer. I've been thinking about this since the beginning of 7th grade and had reflected about this ever since. Enjoy!
- Date: 07/09/2010
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Comments (5 Comments)
- PoodiePie - 07/09/2010
- V is awkward. Sun and sunlight are repeated too close, but the walking line is good. This stanza just needs some tweaking. Stanza VI your rhyming pattern changes, with the middle two rhyming rather than every other. Intention? If not, I'd not change the pattern. Stanza VII is a great ending, and the final line is strong and good.
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- SentryDefiant - 07/09/2010
- It won't be the beginning of the end...beautiful.
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- Evalinna - 07/09/2010
- thats really pretty I like the last stanza!
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- ApricotPeaxhes - 07/09/2010
- Thats really pretty <3
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- ttoki - 07/09/2010
- mmmm i like it!
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