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Hello? Hello? Is anybody there?
Is there anybody who will help me?
Help! Help! I need you!
Why? Why won’t you answer me?
Did I do something wrong?
Help! Help! Answer me! Please!
I’m shattering… breaking…
- by Nami Kiasu |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/07/2009 |
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- Title: a call for help
- Artist: Nami Kiasu
- Description: yah... you no what, i don't know why i did this. but really, do i have to have a reason? anywayz... please comment and rate! dont be mean, i already know im the worst poet ever... lol
- Date: 05/07/2009
- Tags: call help namikiasu random
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Misunae - 10/04/2009
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CRAP! oh wait, im not supposed to say anything mean. but this is CRAP. LOL
Lets see try not making this.. well as the guy below says,
Don't make it a monologue.
These are like.. poems and lyrics and this is like a section in a book. - Report As Spam
- Gbrie - 09/17/2009
- That sound like a monologue ( dialogue but only one person acting ) you should make it look like a poem.
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- Chicky Lizzy - 09/16/2009
- hey yo poetry is when u take out waht u feel in a way everyone understands. So if everyone got it its poetry and no u didnt do it bad, its just missin stuff. But dont worry its cool like that
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- Tranzendental Trumpet Man - 09/14/2009
- It's got potential to be a really good poem with a few minor tweaks, but as it stands, it's just missing something.
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- drawcula - 08/29/2009
- It's... not BAD, per say, just... I don't know, choppy. It's got no flow (except the last line), it breaks.
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- mighty Tiny - 08/29/2009
- IM SO SORRY, I JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND
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- -menTal worDs- - 08/27/2009
- wow. poets can be so cruel. I love that about writing. it really beats the true feelings out of you. (yes i am an arena writer too. lol) 4/5
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