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"Pan"
The boy smiles.
While his top teeth are normal,
The bottom jaw is set in a long line of jagged points.
Arrowheads.
Eyes closed in pain,
For which Emmeline is relieved;
He doesn’t see her flinch.
She studies him
For a moment supporting his head
Above the waves while he reclines in her arms.
He is beautiful,
That much is true.
Dark.
Hair with heavy curls,
Water logged from the sea and
Thick eyebrows that draw together
With each labored breath.
He has a sweet face,
And breathing through his mouth
From the pain
She can see the smile lines around his lips.
He opens his eyes,
Black as midnight
And shiny like a fish.
He smiles.
At her.
Shakes his head ashamed,
Pleading with those sad, dark eyes for her to stay.
She skims her fingers over his bare stomach,
He doesn’t flinch beneath her touch
Allowing her fingers
To search him.
She blushes when she can’t find any wounds.
He had let her touch him,
Half naked,
When he knew there was nothing to find
No physical ailments to add to his pain.
Only the thrumming,
The great shuddering gasps
Of a broken soul.
She is grateful only when he closes his eyes.
Again.
She places her hands hesitantly on his hip
where smooth flesh meets scales.
His skin melts away to reveal a tail.
A fish tail,
twisting and
writhing
in the cold November moonlight.
- by Ellie Belle-ieve it |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 06/30/2009 |
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- Title: pan
- Artist: Ellie Belle-ieve it
- Description: I've been writing about this character for a while now, and plan on turning the short pieces of my "Pan" collection into a longer anthology of poems. This particular excerpt is from the beginning of the middle of the story (if that makes sense) where the characters have already been introduced on an individual basis, but have just met each other. If you are interested in hearing more from either this collection or any other of my pieces please contact me! Unlike Pan, I don't bite...
- Date: 06/30/2009
- Tags: mermaid fantasy lust love forbidden
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Try Not To Read This - 08/02/2009
- i read it again! its so awesome!!!!!!!! 5...99,999,999,999,999,999 stars
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- Try Not To Read This - 08/02/2009
- that...(sniffles and wipes tear with hanky) was so beautiful!!! (breaks into tears shining like moonlight) that was a little of my poetry at the tear thing. But it was real!
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- GAlA Site Developer 2 - 07/01/2009
- This poem is amazing!
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- Ellie Belle-ieve it - 07/01/2009
- Thanks for the comments! I can't believe the line breaks didn't show up, I didn't even realize my stanzas had all mushed together! Weird, but I fixed it. Thank you all!
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- AntiAntiKitsch - 07/01/2009
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I like this, and I agree with Moon's comments. If you want to add to the ease of reading your poems, put spaces in between your stanzas.
Good Luck and I'll see you around.
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- moonkhist - 06/30/2009
- Beautiful story line, and good choice of words. Maye to add more interest in it, change some syntax around with the less impacting lines? Also, try using less enjambment. It makes the poem look a little more neater, and less intimidating to read. (: You have a very good start here.
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- Ellie Belle-ieve it - 06/30/2009
- Wow! Thank you so much! I might add the rest of the story later tonight, I'll keep you posted!
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