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DANG IT!!!-Tori
Mommmm!Why didn't you wake me up!I'm gonna get detention! scream -Tori
Honey,Your not a child anymore you can do it by yourself.-Tori's mom
So your saying that you want me to get detention again? mad -Tori
Ohhh,just shut up and go to school.It's uhhh 8:50.-Tori's mom
Tori running like lightning to school-Narrator
YOUR LATE-Mrs.Munoz
Sorry,you see-Tori
SILENCE!!-Mrs.Munoz
Wow,she's scarier than a dragon is she like related to them?-Tori's mind
Go to which ever seat is empty.-Mrs.Munoz
Heey Tori-Jamie Tori's best freind
Hi-Tori
Shut up back there-Mrs.Munoz
You shut up please-Tori's mind
I have an importantant announcement to make,we have a new student.-Mrs.Munoz
His father is the principal of this school so be nice-Mrs.Munoz
A very handsome boy walks in,he has brown hair and brown eyes.-Narrator
Say hello to the class-Mrs.Munoz
Hey,my name is Dylan-Dylan
Girls are drooling and some of them fainting-.- -Narrator
Boys jealous-Narrator
Sit by that late girl-Mrs.Munoz
Sure-Dylan
Why wasn't she drooling over me?Like all the others?What ever i'll make her.-Dylan's mind
Blahh blah blah blahblah-Mrs.Munoz
Ding Dong Dang Dong-Bell
Tori!-Mrs.Munoz
Yes?-Tori
You have to say here for uhhh 30 minutes here with me because you were late.-Mrs.Munoz
Sigh-Tori
30 minutes later-Narrator
Empty hall-Narrator
She sees Dylan next to the door-Narrator
What are you doing over there?School's over already-Tori
Nothing-Dylan
- by CuteLove77 |
- Non Fiction
- | Submitted on 02/16/2009 |
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- Title: School[1]
- Artist: CuteLove77
- Description: I just wrote this for fun^-^
- Date: 02/16/2009
- Tags: school1
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Strwberry Mew Ichigo - 04/15/2009
- it was good... i think you should write another one... it feels like i am reading over a play.
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- lazylama2 - 04/13/2009
- It reads like you put it down only in note form. To me this is not really a story only a rough plan. I think write it out smoothly and check your grammar, and take out the emotion image things.
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- Arreo The Viking - 04/08/2009
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I see no formal prose form.
It seems to be most like a fictional IM conversation. - Report As Spam
- XXresident-evil leonxx - 03/11/2009
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i liked it but im just the kind of person who can sit still yet im wasting my time on a computer does that make sense? oh well ... it was good
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- Snicketfile2014 - 03/10/2009
- i liked it but it was like a play not a story...
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- Delirious Delurianne - 03/06/2009
- WTF?!?!?! I WANT TO KNO WHAT HAPPENS DAMN IT!!! IT WAS GETTING GOOD!!! >.< sorry lol
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- RiikoxSoushi - 02/16/2009
- sorry, it's good, but it seems rushed. You should add more detail, help set up the saying, u should say something that makes us guess but not clueless. I mean, does she like Dylan? and if she does, you should write "Tori's face heated as soon as she saw him standing there" something like that
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