fate of battle part1

• Artist: master minoto
• Description: THIS HERE IS THE ANIME I WANNA MAKE
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  CHARACTERS
  Zen
  A cheerful, and royal boy who have incredible power..
  
  Tinna
  A friend of Zen. When she was small. she was trained to be a a women who uses sword, but after her father died, she lost the hope of using sword. When she met Zen she found hope of using sword.
  
  Ruji
  A true gunner. Ruji is known as ACECAKE for winning in many shooting contest..
• Date: 07/11/2010
• Tags: unknown

Part 1
Zen are you done yet...... Wait Tinna im almost ready for the contest. Zen you better hurry or else i have to come there and kill you with my sword!! Tinna, well u be quiet. Why wont you shut up Ruji or should i say ACE AT MAKING CAKE! Im coming in Zen!(opens door) Uhh Zen what are you doing.. zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz *snork* uhh it just only you Tinna, huh Tinna!
Zen*evil eye*! Tinna im sorry please dont hurt me! Ah help me Ruji, Ah!!!!!!! Please calm down Tinna!! What you tellin me to calm down! Break it up Zen, and Tinna, are match is in a couple second! Ladies and gentle the battle for the sword of raw contestant will be Zen,Tinna, and Ruji against Rage!!! Ready fight! RRRRRRRRRROOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!
What the heck is that thing Ruji"? I dont know Zen? Ask Tinna. Tinna, do you know what that thing is? Zen watch out! *BANG* damn that Ruji watch out he is coming for you! I know.*clik gun , bang* Uhh and my it withstand my special curve shot...?

Comments

[master minoto]

sry i got lazy this is not my work it is my cousin no lie

[Dorkii Crayonz]

This is terrible. First off, when people are speaking those words should look something like... "words here", that way you don't have to use *action* for actions. I can barely tell who is talking. Also, it wouldn't kill you to use proper grammar.