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flakes fly
winter skys
chilling winds
and Christmas lights
trees and packages
as you walk in the door
children asleep
waiting for
old saint nick
while parents get ready
for the day to come
By: Patrick Patton
- by NecroLord1 |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/10/2008 |
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- Title: christmes time
- Artist: NecroLord1
- Description: white snow
- Date: 12/10/2008
- Tags: christmes time
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Comments (6 Comments)
- InuYashaBlood - 08/21/2009
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you lost your good rhyming effect after "and christmas lights"
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- wapper12 - 06/11/2009
- nice ^_^
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- 5exy_landreyne - 05/05/2009
- it's good
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- HellsGateOpen - 02/27/2009
- i love it !!! its make me wont hot coco
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- jgirl39 - 02/17/2009
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You misspelled "skies" smile
It's good that you left out some articles, it makes it flow better.
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- NecroLord1 - 02/12/2009
- sup tell me what you think check out my other stuff
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