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Shunned out into darkness.
You don't see anything but darkness.
You're falling, but you don't know where.
"Why am I falling,how would I know?"
"Are you afraid of the dark?"
Voices come out from the darkness, but in what direction?
You're scared of the dark, I can see it in your eyes.
Nothing to be afraid of, the darkness won't hurt you.
No need to be afraid if you turn the lights on.
If you turn on the lights, there is no darkness.
Just know one thing, "Darkness Is Everywhere". pirate
- by AntiHatori |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 11/25/2008 |
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- Title: In The Darkness
- Artist: AntiHatori
- Description: All I Feel Is Darkness
- Date: 11/25/2008
- Tags: darkness
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Lijah_Scottech - 03/05/2011
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Dialogue does add to the poem's complexity, and certainly you are very forward with your thoughts.
Darkness was used too often. Maybe try using synonyms?
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- blondie the fine - 08/02/2009
- i think its a wonderful poem that explains what te autour feels. razz its also a bit corny.
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- XxFreyasGaurdianxX - 06/29/2009
- i like it.it shows the reader what ur feeling u use quotes too, very nice. well done. that deserves a five star rating! biggrin
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- Paper Crane Kiko - 12/29/2008
- i agree its very corny...
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- Clementine izzy - 12/22/2008
- corny.
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- nopenopenopekock - 12/15/2008
- This is not bad! i like it.
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