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  • Last Riot 1.6
  • Title: Last Riot 1.6
  • Artist: Leohma
  • Description: page 6 of ch. 1
    go to mieko2.deviantart.com for a better resolution
  • Date: 08/08/2010
  • Tags: last riot
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Comments (4 Comments)
  • anagel - 12/12/2010
  • wow thats awsome ima anime artist to i might add some pic of my stuff maybe keep up tha good work
  • Captain Critique - 11/19/2010
  • Speaking of the artwork, I love your style! I absolutely adore the girl on the last panel! Her facial expression is adorable! You might want to put a little more detail into the backgrounds though. They feel rather simple when compared to the nice artwork! Put a lot of effort into them, and you'll really pull readers in!

    Overall, 4/5! I'd like to read the whole comic! ^w^
  • Captain Critique - 11/19/2010
  • Very nicely done! It feels very full of life!

    The dialogue on the first panel annoys me though. The way you have those two bubbles, it feels like I'm reading: "Well too bad! It's your fault for stealing...my Kimkeis!" If you seperated "Well that's too bad," into one bubble, and "It's your fault for stealing my Kimkeis" into another, it would sound much more natural.

    Also, you shouldn't need to write things like "following" in. You should make it obvious with the artwork!
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