the room

• Artist: uzumaki913
• Description: this happened to me wheen i was six at my cousins house and i never understood what it was
• Date: 08/15/2008
• Tags: fearshiverghostfrightenscaryscarecreepy

About noon on a saturday in summer i was over at my cousins house when everything felt very uncomfortable. As my cousin walked outside i suddenly got a chill from the area behind me. At the time i was six so i didnt really understand the phrase " curiosity killed the cat". But soon i was going to. As i turned i saw a door a white door at the end of the hall that was never there before be there. I slowly walked down the hall with a shiver through my back every step i took. As i slowly opened the door my fear rose. I looked out of one window on one side with a mirror on the other wall. As i walked in the room i started to stare out the window. As i looked i noticed a person that i am still not sure of what sex in a black coat and cowboy hat over there face. As i stared there was a sudden CRASH!!!!. behind me i turned and the mirror was broken but still on the wall. As i ran out of the room i didnt scream i just ran. As i got my cousin to show him the door was gone. As i asked if anyone was out there they all answered. No.

Comments

[i am sad mami]

Better grammar could be possible. It's late at night and after reading the comments, I'm absolutely terrified of the concepts of reading this. I read the last sentence, and seems good. I'll give it a 4/5 because of grammar. And even though I'm too scared to read it (^^) I have a feeling it's good.

[blaze_MiKO]

If I had that kind of experience at the age of six I might have wet my paints. XD All joking aside, that was creepy but you have a talent for writing.

[ii_phatboy]

it sounds like a book or a dream but that... that is the worlds coolest life experience. nothing ever bad has happend to me except splitting my head and leg open XD. 4

[zox-emo-roxas-xoz]

That wouldn't have scared me much at six, I loved monsters and black magic at the time. That would have been pretty cool, and you saw a great thing (if, of course, you're telling the truth).

[Hairball - Parfait]

this is nice, you should read "Under the dust of forest" is by me :3

[selket16]

you could use some polishing with the wording, too much repetition and unnecessary words. More punctuation; commas are your friend. You're doing a lot of run on sentences, which could work considering you were six and excited, but you need more work to get it to work. Otherwise not a bad concept. 3

[Ty Gwynnia]

Interesting, wish something like that happened to me.