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love is a fire burning deep inside love is a feeling people seem to hide when you love someone honest and true let them no who they are who? you love them so much, you cant sleep at night you love them so much you want them in your sight but when it comes down to it will you tell them the truth about your love? or will you keep it bundled up inside afraid of regection? most people make the second one there selection. try to be brave and tell them the truth about your feelings most people die of a broken heart so dont help the devil with his dealings tell your feelings!

Posted by: kumori2005 Mon Oct 09, 2006 @ 05:13am

"Ive got a jar of dirt, I've got a jar of dirt and guess what's inside it"
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Commented on: Mon Oct 09, 2006 @ 05:21am


	whatch all think? it sucks right sad

Commented on: Mon Oct 09, 2006 @ 05:32am


	I enjoyed it all excepted the ended. Dove thing wasn't a fan of. You mispelled "if they" and put "fthey" "Do not fall in Love...do not fall" just doesn't seem right when you read the entire poem aloud. Try redoin' the last three lines and get back to me.

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Commented on: Mon Oct 09, 2006 @ 05:40am

Commented on: Tue Oct 10, 2006 @ 04:23am


	Near Perfect! 9/10 Always room for improvement in writin' Very Nicely Done

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Commented on: Tue Oct 10, 2006 @ 10:37pm

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