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place to store poems and ideas
poems, begginings of storys
well todays been ok im working up to my coco and thats going well so ya heres a poem

life is a tunnel winding down the road
you don't no whats at the end, you can not forbode
you see the ever shinning light up ahead
is it green, is it yellow, oh no its red!
slam the breaks and spin around
do something before ur future is bound
you hit the wall with remarkable force
you feel the adreniline course
through your vains
and you dont feel any pain
so you start the car and speed ahead
to the light that i have unbarebly learned to dread






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[ Bad Kitty ]
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commentCommented on: Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 09:31pm
that's really good!


commentCommented on: Wed Feb 15, 2006 @ 09:35pm
Nice rhyme scheme. You need to work on the flow and pace of the poem a bit more, mostly in the middle.



Sarojin-sama
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XvX Ghost Assassin XvX
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commentCommented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 12:40am
Very nice, Kudos. lots of good symbols ninja


commentCommented on: Thu Feb 16, 2006 @ 02:37am
very nice i like yur style heart



Outter_Rage
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kumori2005
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commentCommented on: Fri Mar 24, 2006 @ 12:05am
ty all
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