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Okay, so yesterday my friend Lily and I decided that we are going to do a collaboration fanfiction of the band Big Bang. I wrote a prologue, two different versions yesterday, to kind of introduce everything before the actual story begins.
Here they are, please tell me what you think and which one you like better:

Choi Seunghyun and Kwon Jiyong are enemies. The worst of them. However, they weren't always like that, they didn't always hate each other, as hard as it may seem to believe. If you look at them now, you would think that they've always hated each other. but, they didn't. They used to best friends, the best of. But something happened that tore them apart, causing them to spite each other. It was all a misunderstanding on both parts. A misunderstanding that was never cleared that lead to their animosity.

Now, those two are a part of two different gangs, mafias really, that the two are just a part of, but lead.

Hating each other from the bottom of their hearts, those two are just as much of enemies as they are rivals. Their mafias are the best in the business, and no one else can compete against theirs. In constant competition, the two strive to bring the other down.

Choi Seunghyun whose code name is T.O.P. is the leader of the renowned mafia IRIS. Kang Dae Sung is his right hand man. He is someone that you do not want to mess with. Despite his cheery disposition that makes it seem as if he doesn't belong in the mafia, don't be fooled. He's one of the best assassins in the mafia world. Code name D-Lite, he never fails to get the job done.

And what about Kwon Jiyong you may ask? Well, he's in the 2nd most renowned mafia. His code name is G-Dragon. Being the leader of the cold blooded mafia Dragon, his right hand man does most of the dirty work. Dong Youngbae, a charming young man with a nice personality; however, he too should not be messed with. Being the right hand man of G-Dragon, he is an expert assassin on par with D-Lite and if ordered to by his boss GD, he wouldn't hesitate to kill.


2nd ver.:

The Choi family and the Kwon family are both at war for total control of the city. Known to be the strongest and most powerful of all the other families, they had quickly risen to the top.

The leader of the Choi family, more widely known as the mafia IRIS is Choi Seunghyun. His code name given to him by the predecessor of the mafia, Se7en, is T.O.P., someone strong but silent and deadly. TOP was given his code name because he was known as the best out of all the members in the mafia and has proven his worth to be at the head of the family. Although often cold and stern, he respected and admired by everyone in his mafia. His right hand man, Dae Sung, is the one of the best assassins in the mafia world. Although he has a cheery disposition that leads you into thinking that he doesn't seem to belong within the mafia world can easily fool you, but don't be mislead by appearances, being the right hand man of T.O.P., D-Lite never fails to get the job done.

The Kwon family's leader is Kwon Jiyong. With a code name of G-Dragon, given to him by his right hand man, he is a cheery type of person, but when it comes to work, watch out, his serious attitude can blow you away. And although serious when it comes to business, his light hearted ways of handling business gains respect from his peers. With his right hand man, Dong Youngbae, code name Tae Yang, they lead the Kwon family, better known as DRAGON. Tae Yang is one those expert cold-hearted assassins, someone who, when ordered by his boss GD, wouldn't hesitate to kill.

However, the two families leaders at war with each other in competition for complete control of the city are not just rivals, but enemies. Hating each other with all their might, they strive to bring the other down in hopes of rising further up the ladder in the mafia world. Feared and respected by many other groups in the mafia world, their families are constantly fighting each other, battles breaking out all throughout the city. So far, the mafia DRAGON is at the top, leading in the race of the best. With IRIS close behind, they never fail to shed blood in order to achieve their goals.

But, as you must know, Kwon Jiyong and Choi Seunghyun didn't always used to hate each other. They hadn't always had this animosity between them, as hard as it may seem when looking upon them now. In the past, before the two were ever involved in the mafia, they used to be friends, the best of. Why had caused them to drift apart? A misunderstanding on both parts. A misunderstanding of a grave situation tore the two best friend apart, leading to their spiteful attitudes and their roles in the mafia world.

so, whatcha think?