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These are just random crappy things that i have written or drawn. Thank you so much if you take the time to look at this!
redface sooo....this idea randomly came into my head, i dont know why, i was just thinking and it came. that happens sometimes. lol. anywahs, sorry if its not any good. and yes, this is still a flash back.

he laid there on his side staring out the window as the nurse cleaned his room. he listened as her shoes squeaked against the linolium floor, and heard her fingers poking at the moniter by his bed. she didnt bother to check him to see if he was awake or not, and that made him smile a little bit no one ever paid attention to him, so why should she? she made a quick glance of the room one last time, before she left the room somewhat slamming the door behind her. he sighed as he sat up again, staring at his scars for the second time, looking at the black thread the doctors had weaved threw his pale skin. he lowered his arms again as he shook his head. he moved the blanket from over him and laid his cold feet on the floor. he shivered as it touched his bare feet. he shouldnt be moving, he knew that, but no one was there to care anyways.

mrrrr. yus. crying






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Winry_Rockbell799
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commentCommented on: Wed Dec 22, 2010 @ 04:57am
There are so many interesting emotions running through this. I especially loved the line, "looking at the black thread the doctors had weaved threw his pale skin," because I can just see that so clearly, the contrast, and even feel it a little. >< I also loved the line, "he shivered as it touched his bare feet. he shouldn't be moving, he knew that, but no one was there to care anyways." I can see so many things happening here: The raw, physical feelings of the cold floor mixed with his own conflicting depression about still being alive tinged with his sadness about no one caring about him, no one being there. This is a really quietly beautiful paragraph. Thank you for posting this! I look forward to more! <3


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