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Compliment Perfection comes only once in a while But i guess it was your lucky day. Because you were born perfect In each and every way. You cant try to hide it Theres no way for it to be hidden. For even the way talk is perfect And you make me want to listen An angel from above That is what you are Your beauty is amazing You have the biggest heart Dont take this as a love letter Because I know you dont like me All this is is a complement A friendly note you see I would go on about you But I only have one thing to say, Dont you know you're perfect In every single way?

Posted by: Spicesayy Mon Nov 24, 2008 @ 12:00am

I'm not sure if forever and always exist anymore....but I'm sure I have an angel watching over me....

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Commented on: Wed Nov 26, 2008 @ 08:20pm


	I'm gonna edit this later. It looks good, I'll send you a PM with the edits in it, okay?

Commented on: Sun Dec 07, 2008 @ 01:52am


	Not bad... your best so far. Meaning still scares the crap out of me because no one is perfect but still.. best so far. Yay: 1. Whoa. You actually spelled things right in this one. 2. It's cute. Really cute. Meh: 1. Biggest problem: watch your syllables. Stuff rhymes better when the syllables go together 2. You repeat yourself a little too much... 3. Line 10: Thats should be that is. Helps with the syllable matching better. 4. Line 19: Perfection should be perfect. A person can't be an action. 5. The meaning still scares me. I barely ever see lighthearted poems anymore. xDD 6. Add spaces every 4 lines.. it makes it easier to read the stanzas.

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