Well i would like to get your opinion on something i started to write a few days ago. I dont really want to write about something that wont be read, or that will be boring like the first chapter of the first book of Harry Potter. I want something that can entertain everyone.
"I was running. But I don’t know where I was going. I was just there, deep breaths pushing into my lungs, while my legs burned with exhaustion. I only ran. I couldn’t stop for some reason. I kept going, faster and faster, till finally, I stopped. I don’t know why I did though. It felt as if I was being chased -followed- through this unbearable maze. Why it suddenly hit my, like I was being followed, I don’t know. No one was behind me, all that was there was the darkness. I was scared. I felt tears running down my cheeks. But, why? What was supposedly after me? I didn’t know, but I knew if I didn’t keep running, I would probably be dead soon. So once again, I ran. Faster…faster, until finally it hit me. This was that dream. But, why now of all nights? Was it warning me of something I didn’t know about? Was I even really dreaming this? Just then, I stopped. My legs wouldn’t run, or couldn’t even move. I couldn’t even tell why. Then my vision blurred, then suddenly, I felt my head hit the pavement below me. That’s when I finally felt darkness fill my body. I was out cold."
What do you guys think about the first paragraph? I dont know if I added enough emotion to it , so i would like to get your opinion on it. Is it good? Would it be something that you might read? Please tell me! I would like to get your opinions on it, and i would like to see what you would like changed about it. Give me something to go on smile
Thankxxx!!!
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