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A new wave of emotion comes flowing through
A feeling unlike the parting wind


good start. definately not ordinary.


For your sake do I fall to the sides of others
Working hard to protect the precious innocence

Kinda disrupts the flow, consider revising.


A love only found in my heart
If only I could express myself
To show I can't live without you

seems honest and heart felt. Simple with a rustic eloquence.


Let's start a new world


Sounds like you are just trying to get in her pants, in which case, more power to ya, but if not, consider revising.

over all, I like it.

um...I was saying that work hard by going to aid others though I do not wish too I do it for her safety and happiness...and about your last comment I wasn't trying to do that...I thought it would be emotionally uplifting for an ending...meaning I love you so much I'll tell you and create a new realationship