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Seduces
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Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 02:22am

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	The Frightning Inside the garage the trash remained Outside the men awaited Beside the men the trash appeared I didn't even bring it there Inside my room i went under the covers Within my soul was a spectre or terror From then the spectre never disappeared in my mind It brought fear to me Since then i shuttered with that fear in my soul Until behind me was a man with one eye Upon the man i reliazed This nitemare was only a dream plz comment this peom and soon to come a love poem heart blaugh

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Epistemologist
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Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 02:28am


	Very smooth, and interesting.... could work on spelling, punctuation, a bit of grammar, clarification and such biggrin but I liked it 3nodding

Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 02:30am


	uhh yea.. good poem lol ^ person above caughcaughdorkcaughcaugh^ but yea i'll show u one of my poems some tym

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EmBeSango
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Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 11:31pm


	its good...but u wanna see sumthing?its a chorus from a song "I don't know why i even try To make you feel alright Always looking out to see that you would be ok I odnt know why I'd even try So hard to make things good for you Would you finally notice me If i disappear?" ^its my song rite here^

Commented on: Thu Jan 05, 2006 @ 11:46pm


	this poem is great very suspenseful. biggrin

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Commented on: Wed Jan 18, 2006 @ 02:27am


	Awsome! You got some talent there! 3nodding

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