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This just has stuff in it that i write...its mostly emo-ish and retarded love-ish type poums...not exactly about anyone i know....and if u like what u read comment...not like anyone cares about my crappy writing...
Strange
Something about a night like this
makes him feel so strange,
This feeling inside
He can not hide,
He just wish it would go away.

The moon rises higher
and so does his fears,
Fear of emptyness
Fear of lonelyness,
That feeling because she's not there.

The moon finally sets
but that feeling wont go away,
She's not here to talk
to listen,
To here the words he wants to say.

The next morning in school she standing there
so he decides to walk her way,
He glances at her
Walks past her,
I guess that feeling is gonna stay.

But...

He takes a look back and is surprized
thinking what he's seeing is wrong.
She walks back to him
she hugs him,
and for a split-second that strange feeling is gone.






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Knit Purl Knit
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commentCommented on: Sun May 03, 2009 @ 01:29am
In the second line of the second stanza, it should probably be "do" instead of does. Aside from that there are a few minor spelling errors,
Very good.
Is this one from personal experience as well?


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