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Bleed Black
My deepest thoughts, concerns, theories and writing. Leave me comments and critique on my writing? =D
Ís af Glæsibragur
    It's cold now,
    The snow is falling like tears.
    Faster her emotions run from what they fear.
    She's lying there all alone,
    Thinking of him.

    His muddy eyes fill her mind,
    They shine with the power of a thousand suns.
    But deep down in their core,
    Is a sight of toxic and secrecy that will make your soul sore.

    Higher, higher
    To her mind it flies.
    Ripping her brain into a million pieces.
    What once was love is now of lust,
    And what once was joy is now plain bleakness.

    Her head is lowered,
    Feel her pain,
    Her eternal love has made her go insane.
    Silently she screams for the angels to save her,
    But the only face she sees is his.

    Stumbling down her dark lit hall,
    She finds a window for a quick fall.
    Looking down at the ground below,
    She can see him there, beckoning her.

    "Come my love, come to me." He says.

    How could she resist such a beautiful face?
    Onto the sill her corrupted self drives her,
    And with one great leap, she's a snowflake, falling with a horrifying elegance.






User Comments: [2]
CorvusCardinalis
Community Member





Wed Feb 13, 2008 @ 10:08pm


Your journal's description says to leave comments, so I hope you don't mind.

I really like this piece. Despite it's lack of definite structure it flows right off the tongue. You can tell it was meant to be spoken. The imagery it summons is both beautiful, and sad; and I believe it conveys your emotions stunningly. Though I really hope you don't leap out of a window yourself, I hope you find some way to resolve whatever it is that has you down.

And keep up the good writing wink

[just wondering, but is that title in Old English?]


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