This is one of my first attempts at real rap... it's not complete, and the wordage is way to complicated for most audiences, but I think I got it to flow as long as I can speak it quickly enough. Rap is too quick to get the message ridiculously deep, so it doesn't have the power of something more controlled, but it makes an impact just the same, I think. Here we go.
The melodramatic magnet of malevolent devilin' in society
Dements notoriety and augments malignity.
So the motive of my vocals and motile ability is killin' sterility. //
For my magnificent magnanimous magniloquence to
Penetrate this perilous pulchritudinous perfidy
(Which pares all our pairs into parsimonious disparities and tends to upset our posterities' clarity)
Is to unveil you, derail you; you're ailin' in your frail jail of coffins TW wailed you nailed shut with your failures. //
Is it the menagerie that saddens me or the reality of tragedy born on a broken adornment?
A unicorn horn, an inordinately torpid warped horse horn when shorn makes forlorn the
Trials we were born with. It files away my mind as it whiles away the time and
It's smoothing us over like a soothing steamroller, it's movement extolling behooving our boring lives... //
The dexterity of my vulgarity in its rarity as I dare to prepare you ensnares you.
If I blare anywhere, if I err on the air is it bare? Do you care if I tarry?
If I query my fans or carry a saraband in my hand just to vary the modus operandi,
Will you notice? Or can we only see what we wanna believe isn't thievin' us, sievin' our meanin's and //
Obfuscating //
What we need to perceive is real?
P.S. TW = Tennessee Williams
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Major points for alliteration and multiple consonances. Seriously, I did not know it was possible to have so many internal rhymes per line of writing. And another point for using "pulchritudinous", just because.
It had a good rhythm too, despite (or because of) the confusing diction, the later which suggests deep meaning but is like a knot of thorns to untangle and comprehend...frankly, it's the kind of writing AP English students dread to be assigned for poetry analysis wink .