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I see the way you look at me,
You're eyes staring at me so hatefully.
You want to kill me in my sleep,
So my soul you can reap.
You think my soul can be bought,
Perish that evil thought.
You try to lead me astray each day,
Try it again and I'll make you pay.
You hurt my family and my friends,
Hoping my trail shakes and bends.
Who are you to try to change me?
"Well, I'm the Devil." He laughs evilly.
Why won't you leave me be,
So I can live peacefully?
"It gets lonely down here all alone,
For my sins I can't atone.
If you saw my ideas you'd agree,
That down here, I need some company."

I know you fell asleep.
Sleep to long,
And I'll give you a beep.
Ignore the beep,
I'll report,
You get banned,
It'll cut your fun short.
So stay active,
And you'll be fine.
Break the rules,
And your butt is mine!
twisted

You went over the top with this compliment. I appreciate the fact that you are trying to make me feel good about my poems, but they are far from expert. There is much to be desired from them. They aren't very well formed and have poor filler rhymes that are amateur at best. I'm not very artistic but I know what I am talking about when it comes to Literature.

This one would ask that comparisons to other's not be made. One hears that "excuse" for pride too often. His poems have interesting inspiration, but lack refinement in a few areas, example, that last poem is a tad hard to follow, but has a good idea behind it. As a reader, i suggest you leave those attemts to sound authoritative on the quality of the writer. His personal feelings are well placed and well supported. The artist knows the weakness in his own art before others notice them. Granted, his work is better than a few of the works i've read, but is not worth bragging about. Go croak in your own pit, ryoumon. Anyone can write a poem, many can give it feeling, most are able to piece together beautiful arrangements, some can create unique ideas, and few can put their soul into their writing, but none are "good" when compared by those who give support like yours. Speak only when necessary in critisism of others. They can figure out most of it by themselves.