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Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 2:38 pm
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I widened her legs a litle bit, they seemed to be too thin. Her arm was also a bit thin. I changed the shape of the breast a little bit, and moved the inner side of her straight arm a little closer to the middle of her body. For the buttom hand, It is a very awkward position, actualy I could not twist my hand that way at all, I drew two version for that hand, the lower one is for the current position, and the one a bit up is how i think would be more natural.
The other hand was fairly well placed, and i drew it as best as i could [anatomicaly].
Also, her haid was a bit too small, I think, and her eyes were too far apart, hence the expression..i think..hehe
I hope this helps, if you have any more questions about the sketch, ask me..maybe i forgot somehting..
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 8:53 am
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 9:10 am
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 6:47 pm
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Hey Aliira! Luffed the pic of the girl with the coco kitty, really love the shading on her hip where her tail latches onto her. I'm no good at that at all, and you're better in Photoshop than I could every hope. =D
You're current wips are nice, I'm glad that you stick to your own style (I've yet to really find my own and stick to it).
1.) You mentioned about the sizes of the people in relation to each other. I think, height-wise, they're fine. I love to see when people draw a male taller than his female counterpart, I'm dorky-traditional or something like that.
You may want to flesh the guy out some. It seems that his arms are just as thin and frail as hers. His hand that's on her waist also seems too small. The only thing that I could think that could circumvent changing his arm and hand is if the person who requested the art likes the guy womanly slender; I wouldn't change it if that's the case, but if not, I'd make him just a bit bigger in that arm, even if he's still meant to be a slender man.
As for her face, I think it looks okay the way it is. But it depends on the feeling you want to give the picture. If left as is, it gives it a 'I'm just posing for this picture and not really into it' kind of feel. Like what you always see in cologne ads and such. I'd think that someone who's all over you, like he's all over her, is someone who's close to you. If you're not pushing the person away, you want them there and therefore should be happy. You could give her a gentle smile.
Unless, considering his face and the arm around her, he's supposed to be possessive and she's not entirely happy about that. Depends on what you want to go with though.
2.) This seems to be a really difficult pose, for both of them, to me, so much so that I'm having trouble getting my head around it. That's not meant to be an insult or anything, I can't really see what's right or not, not because of your drawing skill, but because I'm having difficulty with the poses in my own head. I will say, though, that because of the curve in A's back and the thin arms, it looks like two women posing. Nothing wrong with that if it is indeed two women, but I'm not sure that's supposed to be a man.
*looks you up on dA so she can stalk you*
I really love anime styles, yours is a good one. ^_^
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:23 pm
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Marissael Hey Aliira! Luffed the pic of the girl with the coco kitty, really love the shading on her hip where her tail latches onto her. I'm no good at that at all, and you're better in Photoshop than I could every hope. =D You're current wips are nice, I'm glad that you stick to your own style (I've yet to really find my own and stick to it). 1.) You mentioned about the sizes of the people in relation to each other. I think, height-wise, they're fine. I love to see when people draw a male taller than his female counterpart, I'm dorky-traditional or something like that. You may want to flesh the guy out some. It seems that his arms are just as thin and frail as hers. His hand that's on her waist also seems too small. The only thing that I could think that could circumvent changing his arm and hand is if the person who requested the art likes the guy womanly slender; I wouldn't change it if that's the case, but if not, I'd make him just a bit bigger in that arm, even if he's still meant to be a slender man. As for her face, I think it looks okay the way it is. But it depends on the feeling you want to give the picture. If left as is, it gives it a 'I'm just posing for this picture and not really into it' kind of feel. Like what you always see in cologne ads and such. I'd think that someone who's all over you, like he's all over her, is someone who's close to you. If you're not pushing the person away, you want them there and therefore should be happy. You could give her a gentle smile. Unless, considering his face and the arm around her, he's supposed to be possessive and she's not entirely happy about that. Depends on what you want to go with though. 2.) This seems to be a really difficult pose, for both of them, to me, so much so that I'm having trouble getting my head around it. That's not meant to be an insult or anything, I can't really see what's right or not, not because of your drawing skill, but because I'm having difficulty with the poses in my own head. I will say, though, that because of the curve in A's back and the thin arms, it looks like two women posing. Nothing wrong with that if it is indeed two women, but I'm not sure that's supposed to be a man. *looks you up on dA so she can stalk you* I really love anime styles, yours is a good one. ^_^
thanks that helps so much!!!...just having someone else's opinion..
1) >< i know i have trouble not making guys too skinny..i guess im used to girls, thanks for pointing that out
yeah, thats the feeling i got from her face too. ill try the smile..maybe ill have her lean her head on him too..it wasnt meant to look possesive
2) yeah, theyre both girls : )
thank you so much for taking time to give such a thorough critique ^_^ i really appreciate it very much
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 7:36 pm
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aliira thanks that helps so much!!!...just having someone else's opinion.. 1) >< i know i have trouble not making guys too skinny..i guess im used to girls, thanks for pointing that out yeah, thats the feeling i got from her face too. ill try the smile..maybe ill have her lean her head on him too..it wasnt meant to look possesive 2) yeah, theyre both girls : ) thank you so much for taking time to give such a thorough critique ^_^ i really appreciate it very much
Ah, my pleasure. ^^
I have to be as thorough as possible since I lack the confidence to redline. =D
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