Poem

[Storm_Alchemist]

This is sort of depressing, but this is how a friend of mine sees v-day, even though I wrote it for me a month or so ago. Is it any good?

Unwanted
Unloved
Unable to tell
Am I the girl in the background
Or the charm in your spell?

Do you really care
Or you couldnt care less
This I am Unable
Unwilling
To test  

[Lhia Dunwaith]

It's great! Hey, it rhymes, it flows, it makes sense, it sounds pretty- why shouldn't it be good?  

[azurara]

Wow! I love the whole setup and the rhyme/rythm pattern. Plus.. it makes sense; instead of random words all strung together. Very good! biggrin  

[Aeliara]

I like it's rhythm and the alliteration. 3nodding  

[Lady Pole]

I like it and agree with the other comments about flow and rhyme.
It has a sort of haiku-ish feel that I like also.  

[Manwathiel_Raina]

I like it. It flows really well.  

[Thrain Okensheild]

Random Question?? Can anyone post a poem here?

BTW I realy like it.  

[Lhia Dunwaith]

Well, yeah, people can post poems here... it's only that not many people do. biggrin  

[Thrain Okensheild]

Well great! I have some things some where and i should have them up soon!  

[Thrain Okensheild]

Her eyes are steal and hold no passion,
Her face a ghostly cream,
Her body sleeker than any cat’s,
Her metal ability sneakier than any man’s,
Her temper raging like an unknown flame,
Her clothes darker than a moonless night,
Her movement faster than a shadow,
Her dagger as thin as a piece of paper and sharper than a razor,
Her objective is to kill and survive,
Her master no one,
Her allegiance nonexistent,
Her capabilities endless,
Her motivation is the satisfaction of all her killing techniques,
Her objective to get close to foreign officials,
Her employer whoever needs her,
Her pleasure is watching the blood flow from her target’s neck,
Her only friend, the cold thin dagger that has killed so many a fool,
Her only occupation is being an assassin,
Her name is Shadow Dancer.


Well I did this in 9th grade, I finaly found it in my mass of random crap lolz.  

[Lady Pole]

I like it! Is this based on the D&D prestige class?  

[Thrain Okensheild]

No, lol its from my imagination. But I see where you could think that.  

[mangagirl14]

I like the peom. It is sorta depressing but that's ok  

[Lhia Dunwaith]

mangagirl14

I like the peom. It is sorta depressing but that's ok

Not compared to what I've read! Believe me!