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 Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 9:19 pm
Fallen From the Sky
Angel fallen from your cloud already
I'll tend to every wound you show me
And even though you fixed my heart
When you go, it'll fall apart
Chorus
Look what fell into my arms
From the sky, from the sky
Look what fell into my life
Can't watch you fall out of it
My angel, my angel, poor broken winged
Stay with me tonight
Even though I've whiped the tears from your cheeks
And cleaned the blood all off your hands
I still worry thats all I am
Yet am I so selfish to wish you grounded
Chorus
Don't fall away, please just stay
Cause you fell into my life
Showed me not all right is right
don't fall away please, just stay
Chorus
Bandaged your cuts
Healed your wounds
Taught me to trust
Opened my eyes
So hold me
Don't leave me
Chorus X2
Cause Now it's me who needs you
So stay with me tonight
Or
Heaven's Shadow
I walked alone for the longest time
No one cared, I had disappeared
A hollow shell was all I could become
I am the shadow you won't save
Chorus
No good dreams to follow
No hope to see
I am Heaven's shadow
Every nightmare is true for me
Life is my living death
Nothing but a hollowness in the mirror at night
My mask is my living lie
Told no one of the pain I felt inside
Told no one of the shame filled lies
Chorus
Broken down inside where did all the angels go
Never thought they'd say hello
Left on Heaven's doorstep where you can't see
No one cares that I can't breath
Chorus X2
Heaven's Shadow... holds onto all the loneliness
Heaven's Shadow... takes away my faith
This pain filled lies of my disgrace
This is me, my hollow mask
ChorusX2
I am Heaven's Shadow
Life is my living death
Every nightmare you see
It's true for me...
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Posted: Sun Jun 25, 2006 2:08 pm
I like number two better...But number one is still great! dramallama
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Posted: Sun Jun 25, 2006 9:03 pm
thanks, lol i wasn't sure which one i should work with first.
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Posted: Mon Jun 26, 2006 1:21 am
i like both. you really do have a talent for writing!
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Posted: Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:22 am
pixie1821 i like both. you really do have a talent for writing! Thanks I worked really hard on them! biggrin I'm glad you like them!
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Posted: Mon Jun 26, 2006 4:05 pm
they're both good, but i'd have to say i like #1 better. it creates an image alot better than #2 and i think it also displays a more complex feeling.
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Posted: Wed Jun 28, 2006 9:38 am
i like #2 because it shows that u have some knowledge of life also ur feeling are displayed clearly
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Posted: Wed Jul 05, 2006 3:20 pm
The second one is angsty and convoluted; it tries to display too many things without enough explanation. The first one paints is clear and poetic and better
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Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 9:40 am
Xendre i like #2 because it shows that u have some knowledge of life also ur feeling are displayed clearly yeah i like number 2 couse i seeme like you know alots of thngs but the second one is still cool
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Posted: Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:08 am
i like them both so i cant decide
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Posted: Fri Jul 14, 2006 2:34 am
Both are very poetic, but I prefer the second.
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Posted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 4:48 pm
I like them both. You really do have an amazing talent for writing. I wish I could write songs like that.
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 1:17 pm
bear_spyrit I like them both. You really do have an amazing talent for writing. I wish I could write songs like that. Thanks Will *hugs* I know I already forced you to read all my lyrics already. But thanks anyways.
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Posted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 6:18 pm
crying If I could write like that I'd be so much of a better person lol, I like them both a hell-of-a lot but #1 does give a really good picture and feels more old-school with the rhyming and beauty of it. No offense, but not as thrown together as some music can be now a days. #2 though, I don't know lol. It's really noisy and I can't concentrate on them enough to make anything out it! I only read #1 because it wasn't noisy a second ago, so either way GJ, those took a lot of thought clearly.
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Posted: Thu Jul 27, 2006 9:05 am
Neither of them are my "style", but if I had to pick one.. I'd say number two. I don't want to sound like an a*****e here, but the first one -almost- sounds cheesy.
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