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Thank you very much for your patience with us! We can finally begin your character profile review for Year 2 of Ordell Academy 3nodding we will be using this topic to communicate so please make sure to quote me when you post here.

Okay so I want to start out by saying that Brian is a great character and that you've done a pretty good job in balancing him out between his strengths and weaknesses. However, there are some things that stood out that will require some tuning.

Special Powers (?): Okay so you mention he's an empath which basically means he has psychic powers. The Pokemon world isn't a stranger to trainers with psychic powers with Sabrina being the most notable, but I can't just immediately accept this because otherwise we would have nearly all members wanting their characters to posses some kind of power or another. It is also pretty random how he has this power when there's no mention of his family having some kind of psychic background. I'm going to need a little more convincing for why he should have this power besides "just cause" so I'll give you the opportunity to try and explain to me why him having this power would be good for him otherwise you will need to remove this trait from his strengths section.

Breeder knowledge: now this is more for the sake of making it clear that even though Brian has some experience with pokemon, he is still learning. From the way his knowledge about Pokemon reads it sounds like he knows a lot even though he's still young. i just want to make sure that you're aware that we can't have a character coming to the academy as an expert since that would defeat the purpose of the academy. So I would like for you to mention on his strengths and biography section that he is still learning about Pokemon breeding and care taking.

Pokemon: I do apologize this wasn't fixed, but at this time new players are only starting out with one Pokemon so you gotta choose only one Pokemon (you have 3).

Inventory Items: You've given your character a lot of key items that we haven't approved of. The academy will be providing students with technology for them to use so please remove the PokeSketch and Pokenav from his key items. This also includes the berries, we will distribute items appropriately, but you can't have your character coming in already havin items. You can list stuff like a Sketchbook or notebook, but not consumable items. So please remove all items you've listed in the inventory until we have appropriately given your character items to carry

Lastly I would like for you to create a new profile topic so that we can fix up the look of your profile. The topic you are currently using has the old profile layout mixed with the new profile layout so things are looking a little messy. Please create a new topic and move your character profile there 3nodding

Alright! So this was my review, please read over each point carefully and if you have any questions then quote me and I will answer back. Once you have made all the changes I pointed out then quote me again so that I can review them and give my approval if everything is in order 3nodding

I want to thank you for taking the time to look over Brian's profile, and I appreciate the feedback. I went ahead and moved his profile to a new thread, as requested, as well as changing some things as far as his bio. I also removed the requested items, and added a sketch pad and notebook. If you would kindly review his profile again and let me know if anything else needs to be edited or removed, it would be greatly appreciated.

Thank you very much for making all the changes! I've read the profile again and everything looks great 3nodding

I did notice that you included Brian's grandfather in his biography to try and give some reasoning behind his psychic powers. I have heavily debated this, but unfortunately I cannot allow your character to have this power.

The idea itself is pretty harmless, but at the same time its too much power for one person to have. Feeling someone's emotions can give you a lot of information about the person and even provide someone with the ability to manipulate situations to their favor because in a sense they'll always know what the person is thinking by the emotions they feel coming from them.

So this is my final decision, you must remove all mentions of psychic powers or being able to sense emotions. This includes his grandfather having that power as well. Please remove that from your profile and once you do quote me and I will approve your profile 3nodding

I must also mention that you still included a "Poke Ball" as part of your inventory. I have gone ahead and removed that item from your list, Pokeballs will be given to the students in the new academy year so no one may already have a Pokeball (except for the returning students).

Thank you once again and I look forward to approving this profile ^^

I can understand where you're coming from as far as the empath ability. I went ahead and removed all mention of the ability, including from his grandfather, though I left his grandfather in his bio as teaching Brian to work as a team with his Pokemon, even though Brian was too young to have any Pokemon of his own. Also, is it alright that I left the part about Brian forming a bond with his mother's Gardevoir as a second mother? If not, I can edit that out, as well.

Thank you very much for making all the changes ^^ you're profile has been approved!

I welcome Brian Adams to Ordell Academy!

At the moment we are still getting things ready for Year 2 so please be on the look out for our upcoming announcements regarding the guild 3nodding



Thank you for making the changes 3nodding I did have to edit your Pokemon section to remove certain moves from Gastly. You had some egg moves such as Disable so I had to take them out.

However your character is officially approved!

I welcome Akasha Miranda to Ordell Academy!

At the moment we are still getting things ready for Year 2 so please be on the look out for our upcoming announcements regarding the guild 3nodding

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