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 Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 5:10 am
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Name: Halley Byakko
Halley- Halley's comet
Byakko- Japanese translation of 'White Tiger', one of the four symbols of the Chinese constellations
Blood colour: #B85E04
Gender: presents female, Agender (just doesn't give a sh*t)
Symbol: you ever seen Cloud Atlas? you know that shooting star shaped birthmark some of them have? that. Comet Different Comet
Profile: Halley tends to be a bit of a loner, and is not very fond of large groups of people. being on the lower end of the 'spectrum, she is suspicious and cautious around higher castes; that being said, she's not afraid to fight anyone, and she tends to walk around with a fearless air about her. She's super picky about who she makes friends with, but once she let's you in, you are never getting out. having vitiligo made her an easy target, and she quickly learned to defend herself and become a very good judge of character. her lusus didn't put a big emphasis on eloquent speech, so she has difficulty communication in long sentences, and uses her face and body language, as well as more animal-like noises her lusus speaks in. Considering most of her life is based around necessity, she takes every chance she can to appreciate the finer things, like soft furs, good meals, jewelry, stargazing, anything that rich people have, she likes. very curious and intuitive, she easily gets into (and out of) trouble. slightly cannibalistic, from having trouble finding food early on and scavenging already dead trolls, who later became a semi-regular food source for her, and began actively hunting other trolls every few weeks, alongside wild animals and peoples' lusii on a more frequent basis.
Strengths: Confidence- won't back down from situations, cool under fire and a very stealthy aggression that helps her win fights;
Curious- loves learning new things, and quick to pick them up if it's something she's interested in;
Patient- partially from hunting,partially from being left alone by her lusus for several days at a time, she can wait longer than you can for something;
Intuitive- good at reading people, she lets her gut feeling steer most of her decisions about people, they are uncannily spot-on (with a few exceptions)
Flaws: Arrogance- She knows she's hot sh*t, and you better learn that fast and get used to it,regardless of who you are;
Nosy- when she want's to know about something, she has to know EVERYTHING about it, even if it has sensitive information that you don't want her to know, and she will go to any means to find out the truth;
Stubborn- incredibly strong willed, to the point where she will go down in a sinking ship just to follow through with her idea, usually ignores her intuition when this happens,just to prove a point;
Suspicious- when she gets a 'Bad Feeling' about someone, she refuses to let it go, even if there is no logical reason for her to feel this way about someone. usually it pays off, sometimes it doesn't.
Weapon: prefers hunting spears and daggers, not above using her fists.
Dagger
Spear
Appearance: has big splotchy stripes of lighter grey skin all over her body, makes for great camouflage. keeps her hair shaved on the sides, and long on the top that usually hangs down to her waist on one side, and is usually braided or held back out of her face in some way, sometimes woven over her horns to hide them when she's hunting, which are star shaped. there are usually feathers, beads, and other decorations braided into her hair, from both animals and scavenged items from unfortunate trolls. has earrings and other jewelry from either making it herself or taken from dead trolls. Clothing-wise, she likes to mix and match things from her different meals. a shirt and pants with a lusus-fur cloak one day, and a black dress with white leggings the next. she does like pants over skirts, and she has several pairs of well-worn animal-hide boots that she made herself and is very proud of that.
Home: Halley has made herself a pretty well hidden and extensive tree-hive in the forest. With a cave-like hive underneath a massive tree for her lusus, and a lookout/hunting post deep in the canopy, Halley has everything she needs (including a secret treat stash up in the branches where no one will ever find it) the forest is plentiful, and she never runs out of food (fish and seadweller are her favorites) or freshwater with a lake being nearby.
Lusus: TigerMom is white, like the other lusii, but she has darker grey stripes all over her feline body, and is easily 8-10 ft. tall. She is a fierce and protective lusus, as well as a bit of a loner. halley and tigermom share a very close bond, especially since quite a few of halley's mannerisms lean closer to 'wild animal' than 'troll', because Tigermom decided early on to only tell her what she really needed to know about troll culture, and primarily raise her as if she were a cub. being so big, halley mostly rode on her back, and honed her pouncing, and hunting, skills from up there.
Power: N/A
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Posted: Fri Mar 03, 2017 6:51 pm
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Welcome to Hivestuck! First staff crit inbound!
Right off the bat, it's worth mentioning we already have a troll named Byakko who has a white tiger theme. While we don't discourage multiple trolls to a theme, the name might be confusing. You can check the journal subforum to see what names have already been used.
Character-wise, I'm unclear on how Halley could be around trolls enough to be teased for having vitiligo while also being as feral as she's described in the rest of her profile. That said, mutations far more severe than vitiligo are present on Alternia, to the point where it would be a non-issue to most trolls--especially since it doesn't negatively impact her physical abilities. If she were to be harassed by other trolls, it would more likely be for being a poorly-spoken hermit.
Being "slightly cannibalistic" and "actively hunting other trolls every few weeks," is contradictory. Looting a corpse is one thing, but making a habit of killing people is serial murder. Halley would be imprisoned and culled for it. Everyone on Alternia has weapons training and a lusus of their own. It's also worth noting that Halley will be starting out as a child. The likelihood of regularly taking down trolls without Halley or her lusus dying in the process is slim to none.
How well-socialized is Halley? It sounds like she rarely leaves the forest, or at least never has the need to. What would prompt her to get out in society? Does she enjoy the company of others, or is it more of a chore? What types of people does she befriend?
On a similar note, I'd also like to hear more about Halley's intuition. What in her life has helped it develop to be as accurate as it is? I'd imagine living in the woods gives her a pretty good sense for physical danger, but in what ways does she read people?
How does Halley's arrogance play against her blood color? She seems aware of the hemospectrum and what it means for her as a lowblood. If she's at odds with someone in a fight she can't win, say a physically stronger highblood, how does she react?
Halley's "suspicious" flaw isn't reading as a flaw, since it "usually pays off." Beyond that it seems to have a lot of overlap with her "stubborn" flaw where she ignores logic in favor of going with a gut feeling.
In RP, children have to be escorted by their lusii. To that end, how does TigerMom get along in society?
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