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radish


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PostPosted: Mon Oct 10, 2016 12:37 pm
jinxi carmen
CRYPTIC CRYPTOZOOLOGIST

A girl who lives by the books. Well, only if they're about cryptids. Jinxi's brain soaks in a thick vat of all things cryptozoology and she can rant and rave for hours about the greatness of Bigfoot or Nessie. Unfortunately, it is all she knows, and the prospect of any other social interaction—even something as simple as asking the time—takes the greatest effort to succeed. This has left her with an insecurity that closed her off from others, and an awkwardness when interaction is warranted. Jinxi just doesn't know how to act around people, and this confusion has left her at a crossroads as to who she really is.

MOVIN' UP, MOVIN' OUT

Jizabel made something of herself—moved up from her bed-hopping days, moved into an apartment, moved forward in life—all for the sake of the baby girl in her belly. Never did she think that eighteen years later, the child she was wishing the best for would become a good-for-nothing. Jinxi dropped out of high school her sophomore year when the teasing became too much, going so far as to hermit herself from the world. She wasted the next three years away of her life on online forums and cryptozoology books. Jizabel put up with it half out of love, and half out of a hope Jinxi would open her eyes and turn her life around.

That day never came.

Well, mama dearest couldn't take it anymore, and when Jinxi turned eighteen, Jizabel threw her out with her books, a change of clothes, and $200 to her name. When banging on the door and pleading for an hour to be let back in came to no avail, Jinxi hitched up her belongings to hit the long road to becoming a well-adjusted adult (or something akin to one). Unfortunately, this is easier said than done when talking to others chokes her up and her knowledge doesn't extend beyond what a Tsuchinoko is.

At first, Jinxi tried to make the best of her situation by looking on the brighter side; yes, she was without a place to call home now, but certainly there'd be a ragtag group of eccentrics to take her in and make her one of their own! That's always how it happened in the movies! Well, reality isn't that nice, people aren't that nice, and the bite of not knowing anyone hit her harder than she realized.

She has tried to cope by seeking comfort in her books; rereading her favorite entries and going over what she knows. Yet, when this proves futile, she turns to the ears of her companion, Nancy Tucker, a white shorthair that hangs out in her duffel bag. Sure, she knows the stray only sticks around because Jinxi's sweet on her with food, but the girl's glad to have something listening on the receiving end of her sighs. Unfortunately, this kind of comfort isn't extended to other people of Ashdown, and she is prone to innumerable social blunders and long, awkward pauses when talking. Doubled with her tendency to mill around the state forest, and she draws more than a few questioning glances.

Her regular day-to-day excursions consist of the fulfilling the necessities of life—food, water, warmth, a roof over her head, and most important of all, money. During the day she's usually wandering around town with her eyes glued to the pavement for pennies or poking her head in alleys or trashcans when no one is looking for a thrown out meal, even napping in the local cinema when she can afford a ticket, and at night, she calls the forest her home and is usually curled up at the base of her tree using her duffel bag as a lumpy pillow. Unfortunately, this lifestyle change has taken its toll on her, and pushed her mind into a pit she doesn't have the strength to climb out of.

PERFECT PAGE

Whenever Jinxi thinks of a cryptid, she can open a book and it will land on the starting chapter or page about it.

ANYTHING ELSE?

+ Eighteen years old.
+ Of Hispanic descent; doesn't know a lick of Spanish, though.
+ Appearance inspo; hair should have a very light yellowy tint as she is a platinum blonde.
+ Her sense of style is awful and she pretty much wears anything that is clean. The sloppier and more mismatched the style, the better. Outfit inspo.
+ Has a very sour opinion of school and school settings; going so far as to shut down at the mention of anything related to her education.
+ Her scope of human interaction is very limited, so it is unknown how she would react to flirting or romance.
+ Jinxi has a noticeable stutter, but she can talk pretty evenly without it coming out. It is only during swells of emotion that it can really jumble her speech.
+ She's the most awkward when comforting someone; she doesn't mind being a shoulder for someone to lean on for support, but don't expect any soothing words from her.
+ She pushes up her glasses when something piques her interest.
+ Her birthday is Valentine's Day.
+ Has a white shorthair cat named Nancy Tucker that hangs out in her duffel bag. Yes, you must say her entire name.

* Expanded/revised her entry from the character contest a bit. Original post.  
PostPosted: Mon Oct 10, 2016 1:56 pm
Unoderi

friendly neighborhood em here!

JINXI UR ADORABLE AND PRECIOUS.

your high concept? love it! i totally get a sense of who she is at her core with it.

your trouble for her, on the other hand, could use a little more. How has being thrown out by her mother impacted her life? What is she doing now? How is she coping? How does she handle being out on her own with a limited to no RL social circle to fall back on for support? How does the world (and other townsfolk) view her and react to her? These are questions that will help because we want to know about Jinxi, not just her mama!

when you've made these changes, give the title a spin and me a quote!  

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radish


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PostPosted: Mon Oct 10, 2016 8:39 pm
azuredreams

ty for the crit! i hope i managed to touch upon everything, but if i missed something or anything needs elaboration/clarification, do let me know!  
PostPosted: Thu Oct 13, 2016 9:04 pm
Unoderi


immediately standing out is the fact that you have her completely homeless and living in the forest. this actually is not something that is workable, especially given what has happened recently and that the rangers frequently work the forest. couch hopping is preferred or in the very least staying at the YWCA/YMCA or one of the places that looks out for teens locally. it's not that you can't have her homeless but there are plenty of avenues available for her to have a roof over her head from somewhere most of the time.

i do like where this is going but a huge portion of her trouble is backstory and could fall into an other info section (this especially is true with the bits about her mama). troubles are things that are exactly that- they trouble your character. they're used by the gm and the rp staff to help generate plots for your character. they are also something that help you, and other players, find rp ideas with each other.

some things you may want to consider when you do your revisions are (you don't need to USE all of these, these are just meant as guidance to give you an idea of what we're looking for):
    - how does she relate to the people around her; how do the people around her relate to her and how does this impact her view on people (such as because she sees people giving her looks does she pull back more and further retreat? or does she want to try and push back? to get out of her situation?)
    - jinxi seems to be a loner by nature and doesn't seemed truly troubled by the way her life is right now (the lack of social contact outside of Nancy Tucker)
    - if she's barely able to feed herself, i would want to know how she's feeding Nancy Tucker. is she going without food herself to look after this cat?
    - her being homeless, again, isn't really a good trouble in general; there needs to be some emotional drive, something that she's trying to improve upon because jinxi seems very stagnant and not moving forward. this could be another minor trouble for her to deal with: her complacency in what has happened and where her life is
    - why has she not reached out to try and get a job? what's stopping her from working? this is a college town and there are more than a few opportunities for teenagers to get a job

also a note about her power! dreamer powers are things that the world does for you, not something you actively do yourself. the power is a touch too specific and reads as if jinxi could pick up any book and have it suddenly have a chapter in it about a cryptid that wasn't there before. you may want to consider having it be 'books always seem to open to the page that she needs' or likewise think of something else.

give the title a spin and quote me back when you've made revisions! also feel free to message me on AIM (happinesselude) or PM me if you need anything.  

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