Question For A Stranger

[Rockerenigma]

Here we are, here at last
Caught up in this enchanted glance
Eyes still, hearts abeat
Moving faster than wings in flee

One step forward , one step back
Are you the man I dreamed of last?
The man there, in my dreams
Protecting me from things unseen?

One step forward, one step back
Are you really here at last?
Do I kiss, do I hug?
Should I even touch at all?

One step forward, no step back
I loved you stranger before first glance
You understood and made me see
Dropping walls surounding me

So here I am standing here
Quaking here in nervous fear
No longer clothed for all to see
Are you still in love with me?  

[Jessa Hazel]

I really, really like this. Unfortunately, I'm not quite sure of what to write for a critique. So if you don't terribly mind; I'll leave that for someone else. The only part that was off was the 'moving faster than wings in flee'. I think you were going for the equivalent of wings in flight or fleeing wings?

Still the rest of the poem, I thought, flowed beautifully. I especially liked the last stanza. It was beautiful. heart Thank you for sharing. heart  

[Rockerenigma]

lol thanks and I wrote it as "wings in flee" because somehow it didn't seem right any other way but thanks lol  

[your babbygirl]

i feal like ive bin there you did wonderful heart heart heart  

[DrksStoryteller9000]

so far that is one of my favorite poems, ive been through that, and still am. love it and i really dont have anything to say that is wrong with it  

[Ashtoreth the Wanderer]

Rockerenigma

lol thanks and I wrote it as "wings in flee" because somehow it didn't seem right any other way but thanks lol

I don't think that this part is too awkward, I've often bent convention a little to suit my artistic needs wink
The poem is amazing. It flows very well, it isn't awkwardly written where you feel like there's forced rhyme scheme or pattern.

In short - loved it, great work! heart