what do u think of this song i wrote?

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

TRINITY

Today the cutest thing occurred
Out of all my insides I have transferred
The only one left without a bleeding hole
The one she said that she preferred
My sweetheart took away my soul
I am now under your control
Lying next to blades that I wish were dull
Wearing such a skin-tight skull
There is nothing I want more
You are my beautiful whore

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Cut off from normal circulation
Where in hell is this location?
My hands amidst unsteady vibration
The lifeless decline of my vacation
Mesmerized by connotations
Where to break off my concentration?
Who should I kill in desperation?
What caused my eye's dislocation?
How did I take this mental immigration?
When will I get cured from oral infestation?
It's biting my mind
Making me blind

Inside me
Beside me
Behind me
Around me
Outside me
Above me
Below me
Everybody is...
They all are...

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Representing all divinity
Separating all affinities
Enter this new vicinity
This hell is my holy trinity

Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails
Every system crashes
Every attempt fails

 

[BloodyKateMary89]

Wow... How the hell do come up with that stuff? Are you, like, a Muse or something?  

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

DarknessxFire

Wow... How the hell do come up with that stuff? Are you, like, a Muse or something?

thanx for the compliement, lol. but im not really a muse sweatdrop ... lol  

[BloodyKateMary89]

It honestly seems that you haev either
A)Been tutored
B)Been given godly powers.


I am damn serious.  

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

DarknessxFire

It honestly seems that you haev either
A)Been tutored
B)Been given godly powers.

I am damn serious.

neither of those actually, i simply write what's on my mind, usually i write when im at an extreme of a negative emotion (usually depression or anger). ive been writing for like 7 months now, i admit i really sucked when i first started writting.  

[BloodyKateMary89]

eek stare Ahhh.... I see.... Kinda like... Never mind... Sory... Today I will be typing like this a lot.... I hate Valentine's day and everything assosciated with it.... *mutters darkly under breath*...