Children

[Emmerah]

thought i'd take a break from lost love for a while, see if you can guess what this one's about... and, as always, please comment 3nodding

The brightest stars; The darkest fall
Unknown scars; They bear them all
Strangers.
Peaceful lives; They do not know
Pain unrealized ;It does not show
Children.
They can't resist; Through the pain,
Harm persists; Through silent rain
Frozen.
The pictures still; It's all the same,
One more lost will; With nothing gained

 

[EstoPerpetua]

Love it, love it, LOVE IT! Great rhyme scheme, great rhythm, great poem. You really should take a break from lost love way more often, because this is a fantastic work. I hate to admit this, but I can't really figure out what this is about sweatdrop , I feel really stupid right now, please excuse my ignorance. I like the words and the way they almost move and flow, but still, I can't find the core of it all, what it's REALLY about. Anyway, keep up the fantasmic work, I'd love to read more!  

[Emmerah]

kapow123

Love it, love it, LOVE IT! Great rhyme scheme, great rhythm, great poem. You really should take a break from lost love way more often, because this is a fantastic work. I hate to admit this, but I can't really figure out what this is about sweatdrop , I feel really stupid right now, please excuse my ignorance. I like the words and the way they almost move and flow, but still, I can't find the core of it all, what it's REALLY about. Anyway, keep up the fantasmic work, I'd love to read more!

thanks so much. I checked my comments and was just expecting another one sentence type thing, then i saw it and i was like. WOAH! I got's praise ~ heart
I actually just started with no inspiration at all, then decided on a theme. Maybe it's just me who thinks it's obvious.. since i wrote it, but it's actually about child abuse. And i could go into my uber long speech on my opinion on the matter. But I'll save that for debating sweatdrop ...  

[EstoPerpetua]

Oh, I won't comment with one sentence, that really irks me. Anywho, now that I been told what it's actually about, it makes so much more sense and has much more meaning. Thanks for sharing your work!