Crits/red-lining help please?

[xobooka]

for this piece! >:
here

uhm, so the figure looks REALLY horrid.
and definitely impossible... LOL

I would love some comments, suggestions or redlines!
maybe an idea of what to do with the hands? otL emo or whatever you can think of!  

[ASHLEYASDFGH]

how about this~?

 

[keiiii]

I wanna touch her hair! heart

The main problem, IMO, is that there's no indication of the ribcage. The second thing is the position of her right arm. When I try to put my arm like that, my elbow points forward rather than downward because of my boob. XD;

The shape of the head is a little off too, but that's kinda hard to tell (her hair might be in a bun, but I can't really tell).



You can ignore the elongation of the torso if you prefer to stylize your anatomy with shortened torsos.  

[xobooka]

you guys... are AMAZING ; __; thank you so much! heart
definitely excited to finish this now