The Ransom Note

[-PrimaCzarina-]

Ransom Note

I stole your heart and you can’t have it back.
It’s only just -- you did start this affair.
However: If you can promise me one thing,
A single little trinket, maybe we can share
If you give me a circlet that does “sing”
Then my heart may be saved an attack.

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I like the rhyme scheme but I feel like I'm trying to hard to force it into the pattern which is messing up the flow. xP

Criticize as hard as you can, yes?  

[iDeViLPsYcHo]

Interesting scheme, I don't believe I've seen that before. Also nice little plot with the poem. Keep up the good work. ^^;  

[evolvingwolf]

I'm not familiar with that style of poetry, but I do adore what you did with it. ^_^  

[maldito monstruo]

Huzzah for The Ransom Note!

 

[thomulus]

Lol A-B-C-B-C-A. craziness, and the flow still goes, although I did have to look again to find the A and the B rhyming schema, but once I noticed, I really liked it