I Want A Guy...

[cre8ive_ovadose]

I want a guy who’ll always be there
Who’ll hold me tight
And stroke my hair

Who’ll know it when I’m not okay
Who’ll call me at night
Even when he’s not away

Who’ll cook amazing food for me
By candlelight
Beneath a tree

Who’ll kiss me no matter where we are
Around our friends
Or in the car

Who’ll hold me while I fall asleep
And whisper to me
“Don’t make a peep”

Who’ll spin me around to make me laugh
Who cares if they think
That we’re daft

Who’ll listen to me babble on
About my band
And favourite song

Who’ll kiss away the scars and pain
And take me walking
In the rain

Who’ll follow as I walk away
And ask me nicely
“Won’t you stay?”

But when is it
He’ll finally see
That he’s standing next to me?  

[Jedit Ojanen of Efrava]

that is a very strong poem. It is very well done. Kudos to you!  

[ProfessorKC]

Rythm and meter have SOOOOOO much significance with poetry. I fell into a trap in a way reading this. I started picturing I was reading a Dr. Seuss book and the rythm was exactly the same as what he commonly uses in his young children's books. Not that this is a bad thing, but it would definitely color anything I'd have to say about it.

I was babysitting my 3 year old nephew today so the Dr. Seuss thing was indeed hard to avoid xp