Bubble

[FEBRUARY17]

*pop*
spatters of soap
hit the porch
of the old country house
down the road
and to the right
where the little boy sits
and wonders why
bubbles *pop*  

[evolvingwolf]

I haven't seen a poem like this in a long while. I never was a fan of this style, but you really did a great job, in my opinion. I actually like it! ^_^ What you did with the noise aspect was genius. Keep it up!  

[FEBRUARY17]

redface
OMG thank you so much!  

[Stelle Cadenti]

I have to agree with Wolf on this one, it's very simplistic, but in a good way. It's really cute too. Just one suggestion on the formatting, you should put the *pop's* in italic, instead of with these **.  

[Jeyrin]

I second Stelle's opinion that you should use italics instead of asterisks on the pop part. It's very cute though. I like it!

 

[a very small bird]

It IS cute~!! :] Keep writing. And I third (does this work? O.o) Stelle's opinion! :3  

[mixlemaxle]

I hate to keep a trend going, but I FOURTH Stelles opinion.

I love it anyway though. Keep it up!

 

[FEBRUARY17]

Thank you guys soooo much! Next time I will put the pops in italics. smile  

[Jedit Ojanen of Efrava]

Omg I have to be different... put it in bold!!! um actually dont... it is supposed to be italiised... if I spelt that right...

kathy_chan_waterspirit

I hate to keep a trend going, but I FOURTH Stelles opinion.

I love it anyway though. Keep it up!