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Miss Nonsense

PostPosted: Thu May 28, 2009 7:17 pm

This is one of my favorites, written for a friend of mine.

Open mouth, closed mind.
Closed heart.

Shut tight.
No key...
that you know of.
I could be that key,
wrought-iron and sharp-mouthed.
Slipping into your lock. Releasing you
from whatever it is that's
holding you back.

Perfect fit?
I couldn't say.
Yet.

But I'd like to think so.

You draw us in, all of us.
Closely, meticulously, all too aware.
Until we can read that sign
that you've propped up next to that chasm
that is your feelings.

CLOSED FOR MAINTENANCE,
it says.

Why don't you let go?
Why can't you?

The pills,
they're an
excuse
that you repeat to yourself, every night,
to keep yourself from wanting.

Conscious,
intangible.

Go ahead and want.
Preferably,
you'd want
me.

But if that's not
an option,
that's
all right.
Really.

I know that you're busy.
 
PostPosted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 12:43 pm
I really like this, I don't know what I can really say besides that. The flow of it worked, though it wasn't necessarily traditional. It made it very interesting, keep up the good work!  

Stelle Cadenti
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Santinka

PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 2:05 pm
I do believe I've read this poem before! I liked it then as well as now. If I had seen the poem first I think I still would have guessed it was you who wrote it.  
PostPosted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 4:17 pm
Santinka
I do believe I've read this poem before! I liked it then as well as now. If I had seen the poem first I think I still would have guessed it was you who wrote it.

Thanks guys!
Yeah, I did post this poem in the Lair of Shadows guild too.
 

Miss Nonsense

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