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When you're writing about a character's past, it's important for it to come out naturally. I would suggest implying much of the story throughout your character's actions. Often, your readers will understand the subliminal messages you're trying to send. You also want them to ask the questions for themselves, right? However, if you come to a point where you HAVE to talk about the "history" directly, you should probably try to incorporate dialogue in an effective manner. When you have two characters, for instance, and one of them is telling them story, use the second one to your advantage! She/he can be "actively listening". That way, they can ask relevant questions, or have specific reactions that act as a sort of trigger to what you're going to write about next. Anyway, I hope that helps you, and anyone else who's stuck with the same problem. As for a name: I don't know if you already have one, but here's a suggestion anyway: Haida. It's the name of an aboriginal group in British Columbia, Canada. But I think it makes for a pretty Gypsy name too ! biggrin
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Ok, no one will care, but I have some of a story that I wrote that I would like for you to try and read. I will gladly accept any constructive critism on it. Thank you! : ) 4laugh Chapter 1 Behind the Brick Wall I open my eyes to complete darkness. Why would the lights be out at this time of night? Then suddenly the lights came back on, and off, and on, and off again. Then I realized, Nicky. He’s my little brother. He’s sort of like frosting on your nose from eating cake; try to get it off with your tongue, but can’t reach it. It’s annoying! He ran into the kitchen. Well, at least I could get some sleep until I have to get ready for school. Soon, as if right on time, the alarm clock went off. I groaned. I might as well have some breakfast before school. I went toward the refrigerator. My options were: last night’s spaghetti, tuna, 1 week old milk, 5 day old pizza ( yuck, with anchovies!) bell peppers,… AHAH! Toaster strudels! I took one out of the box and put it in the toaster. I heard my overly dramatic sister banging on the bathroom door, screaming at my mop headed brother to get out of the bathroom. (He does tend to take a long time in the bathroom and all, trying to scope out new armpit hairs; yeah right!) “Max get out of the bathroom already, I’m sure you have plenty enough cologne on. I mean how your girlfriend stands that disgusting stench is completely beyond me!” said my older sister, Rebecca. “Calm down, I’m almost done!” “Mom, Max is hogging the bathroom again!” screamed Rebecca. My mom came running from her room like there was some big emergency. “Can’t you guys think of anything else to do besides terrorize me to death?” Mom seemed angry, because she usually doesn’t start her morning off with threats. Mom walked up to the bathroom door and banged on the door. “Max if you don’t get out of that bathroom!” screamed Mom. “Rebecca, it doesn’t matter how many times you wash your face, or hide it with makeup, you will never get that ugly off your face!” he snickered. He obviously didn’t know it was Mom. Christina’s (my Mom) face got red with anger. She busted down the door. Mom dragged him from the bathroom. “Rebecca, get in the bathroom and get ready for school,” barked my Mom. Nicky ran past Christina…, naked. “Max, get your brother dressed, please.” Yes, this was my typical school morning. I know what you’re thinking; it’s chaotic and crazy right? Well, not all my family is crazy…, err okay, it’s crazy. But my brothers aren’t always running around the house naked! nk You! : )
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crimson_kanji When you're writing about a character's past, it's important for it to come out naturally. I would suggest implying much of the story throughout your character's actions. Often, your readers will understand the subliminal messages you're trying to send. You also want them to ask the questions for themselves, right? However, if you come to a point where you HAVE to talk about the "history" directly, you should probably try to incorporate dialogue in an effective manner. When you have two characters, for instance, and one of them is telling them story, use the second one to your advantage! She/he can be "actively listening". That way, they can ask relevant questions, or have specific reactions that act as a sort of trigger to what you're going to write about next. Anyway, I hope that helps you, and anyone else who's stuck with the same problem. As for a name: I don't know if you already have one, but here's a suggestion anyway: Haida. It's the name of an aboriginal group in British Columbia, Canada. But I think it makes for a pretty Gypsy name too ! biggrin
Wow! Thanks! That's some good advice. I really like that: Haida. I don't have the name set in stone yet.
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