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Stelle Cadenti
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 12, 2009 3:36 pm
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I only did this because Bounds asked me too... As a cautionary note, you're head may explode if you try to get any sense out of it. It's a first attempt at this kind of style.

I did it about Easter, because it was a convenient topic. Here goes nothing.

Easter eggs crack underhand
yolk, blood, all, spill
Spring chickens and dinner plates
aren't meant to mix

Laughing around the trees outside
rabbits of plastic and smiles so wide
the hunt begins with arrows and bows
Spears to pierce the armour
When will the days come down
to where I can finally see them
Where will they go in my basket

Green grass rises to meet me this morning
the hunt began the night before
from thoughts of rain
of thunder
of singing to the wind

I see you are not to stay
to be on your way right down the road
the old road, cracked with paving stones
Remnants of the eggs I held
all pieced together, shell by shell
 
PostPosted: Sun Apr 12, 2009 3:41 pm
That made perfect sense to me, hard to explain yet I understood it.

I love how it seemed so, well normal, then sinked ito a sad, even prehaps aggressive tone, those words touched me, I felt the emotion. I love how this is such a twist in plot along it's lines.

I love what you've done here.

I m truelly a fan of your work now.  

Kindless
Crew


Stelle Cadenti
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Prophet

PostPosted: Sun Apr 12, 2009 3:46 pm
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Well, then, I will have to try more. This only took 5 minutes, so who knows how much more I can write! Soon I'll be able to take over the world with nonsensical poetry!

I guess I need to think of a title for this now...

 
PostPosted: Sun Apr 12, 2009 3:50 pm
I usually take one word from my work and name it that. I never spend more than 5 minutes on a piece of work. I'm glad you like my style of writing, with such impressive results, too.  

Kindless
Crew

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