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Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 2:35 pm
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Please leave any feedback you may have about my poetry..
Thank you...
I will post them every so often so I can look at the feedback of each one...
Crimson Tears
*This is the intro to an Evanescence-style song I am creating*
Crimson tears roling down my face Dreadful fears that none can erase Fallen cheers are flooding this place Yet no one hears the (sorrow, darkness) in this space *No one hears this screaming in this empty place*
OK...now here are the notes on this....
This intro is supposed to be done by a guy with a very slight british accent with a semi-deep voice.... The BOLD words stand for when he sings unusually deep, there is almost no backgound music here, and the rest of the band sing deeply too, but softer and like a shadow of him singing, then there is a small pause and it goes back to normal singing, from normal to semi-high pitch....
For the sorrow and darkness, they both fit depending on the type of song you create....sorrow fits best for me...
For a while I had a mental block about how I would transition the third line to the rest of the song...My friend had given me the line in *'s to try and help me...but then I thought of my last line...
*I will post more updates, notes, inspirations, etc. for my lyrics later*
(The intro to Crimson Tears is also published in 2 books.)
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Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 4:01 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 4:46 pm
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Posted: Tue Nov 01, 2005 4:47 pm
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Posted: Fri Nov 11, 2005 1:48 pm
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