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Posted: Sat Jan 31, 2009 10:43 pm
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Posted: Sat Jan 31, 2009 11:21 pm
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The Mysterious Gunslinger
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Posted: Fri Feb 06, 2009 2:21 pm
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I won't give you my honest opinion because you'll hate it. But I'll tell you this:
'sol is running down as it seemed to be a 1 one way hall. huffing harder and harder it seems like there wont be an end to this. crash!'
No. First of all, this is how it'd be written with proper grammar, punctuation, and capitalization.
'Sol ran hard, his lungs burning as his breaths became quick and shallow. The hall continued on, no matter how much distance he seemed to have covered, it went on, forever.
A loud sound erupted from behind him, causing him to increase his speed. "What the heck is going on?!"'
From that I am sure you can take a few notes. Capitalization, punctuation, and the right sentence structure helps.
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Posted: Fri Feb 06, 2009 4:20 pm
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Posted: Wed Feb 11, 2009 6:49 pm
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The Mysterious Gunslinger I won't give you my honest opinion because you'll hate it. But I'll tell you this:
'sol is running down as it seemed to be a 1 one way hall. huffing harder and harder it seems like there wont be an end to this. crash!'
No. First of all, this is how it'd be written with proper grammar, punctuation, and capitalization.
'Sol ran hard, his lungs burning as his breaths became quick and shallow. The hall continued on, no matter how much distance he seemed to have covered, it went on, forever.
A loud sound erupted from behind him, causing him to increase his speed. "What the heck is going on?!"'
From that I am sure you can take a few notes. Capitalization, punctuation, and the right sentence structure helps. well tnx for dat i know my grammer is a picese of crap and i hate school so its not easy. and dat is way better then what i would have though up. tnx. and yah thx for being so not harsh.....
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Posted: Wed Feb 11, 2009 6:51 pm
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Posted: Sat Mar 14, 2009 7:55 am
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