My Song (Now with an mp3! Making changes to song...)

[Dayam]

i haven't posted much in here but...
i'm writing a song about my recent break up
its gonna be in chinese
i have a short clip to hear what it sounds like

i haven't figured out the lyrics yet
edit: still haven't.... not sure if i can do it lol

please tell me if you like it or not, what good and whats bad?

Short clip
http://s153.photobucket.com/albums/s236/dayam_photos/?action=view¤t=Forget.flv

Edit:
Here is the full new version!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I4pPk5Ic3Hk

Edit:
Download the mp3!
Download Here

Edit:
The latest version! V.2! + download
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fj-jUA65VBQ
download mp3 here  

[XvXYuNiEXvX]

So far I think it's pretty.
But I must know how it sounds like when you add lyrics and the way it's sung than that's when I can really judge. =]

Btw you're quite talented!
I've always wanted to write and play my own music, just I don't play lots of instruments to get to that point...so I'm just left wih my voice...^^;  

[o-re-sa-ma_Elegance]

dude, it's AWESOME.  

[KairiYukine]

Never meant to be cruel,

Heeey, I like it. =]
I'd haven't played piano lately. I should play it more often. ><

Never meant to hurt you...

 

[MizukiLee]

Composer! :'D It sounds beautiful. Keep at it! <3

People'll want to hire you. BD  

[Rayns Fyre]

Ohmai..
It sounds good ^^
But if yuur gonna make this into a song..
yuu have to have a chorus tho x]

 

[s u n n y _ l o t u s]

Wow! ^^
That sounds so cool! smile
I like it. whee

 

[Taiyus]

woooowww~~
I just absolutely love your song ;w;
You are a great composer~ yup yup! :3
Keep it up like that~ 8D

Can't you record it into an audio format~ I just want to have it in my playlist 'cause it is beautiful ;w;
<3<3  

[Sesshomaruka]

omg, its beautiful ~
(sounds like it can be in one of those drama's)

you composed it to?
wow, you are talented; i envy you gonk

like Taiya Rei said, is there a way you can record it in an audio format? i realy like it ><  

[Chinese Chami]

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Beautiful!~

It sounds like it came straight out of a K-drama.

It also reminds me of a lullaby a bit... too much?

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[o-re-sa-ma_Elegance]

omg i cant wait for the lyrics!!  

[Dayam]

hey guys, thx for all the compliments.
I"m still working on the lyrics... haven't gotten much.

I will try to get it into a audio format for all to hear^^  

[DancingCherryBerry]

Sounds lovely. Though I'm not sure if you should still put lyrics to it. Depends how good the lyrics are too. I think without lyrics, its just as good!! The lyrics could possible kill the song.. 3nodding  

[Azirru]

Nice musical accompaniment. It's nice to hear! It makes me feel happy. If i were you, you should make a copyright of that one. Since you'd already put that in Youtube. There will be people who will stole you're piece.

I'm looking forward to the lyrics. Pls make an english version so I can understand. ^^  

[Dayam]

woot! i have the mp3 made for those who wanted the audio format only.
Download here