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Cupcake Flavored Insanity
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 Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:08 am
I have a poem and please tell me what you think of it. You may also post your own poetry if you like.
Poem name: Dream
Whisper in the yard and turn the trees all into toys
Lay there on the ground and turn the dirt into your joy
From what I see and what I know its all been boring lately
So I suggest we trade a question mark in for a mabey
Time your riddles right and make a point that has no sense
Make sure that your smiling and the moneys been whail spent
Innocence and Ignorance it all goes hand and hand
I not sure that I am right but I hope you understand
I hope that you still searching for the start that has no end
And all the plastic people have now become your friends
Before you start to drift and your soul begins to SCREAM
I just wanted to tell you that your listening to a
Dream.
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Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:11 am
I do have some depression issues because I liked a guy he didn't like me back and I am getting made fun of and on top of that I get picked on (Hurt) by my older brother and my ex-friend is one of the kids that are making fun of me. Depression sucks.
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Cupcake Flavored Insanity
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Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:19 am
Ummm well this is my name and I did a
Acrostic poem.
Happy
And
Younge
Loving
Every
Inch
Giving
Help
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Posted: Sat Jun 28, 2008 11:59 am
xXAliaChizueXx I do have some depression issues because I liked a guy he didn't like me back and I am getting made fun of and on top of that I get picked on (Hurt) by my older brother and my ex-friend is one of the kids that are making fun of me. Depression sucks. Get over it. Why are you still in the past? The only reason why depression is still lingering upon you is because you let it. Depression can't hurt you unless you want it to, unless you give in to it. Who cares if they make fun of you, you pick up your head and move forward, not submitting to how they treat you. You know? You can start a new life today or whenever you are strong enough and forget the past. Oh and your poems, they are bad...I suggest to keep playing around with the words and tweaking them.
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Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 8:15 am
OneXMuerte took my words
sad oh well.
Your poems do suck. Not trying 2 b mean
uh...the wording is &*(#ed up
and it makes you look Not depressed but u want 2 kill your self, And still being nice to those who r mean 2 u.
Guess what?
GET OVER IT
life is a cruel evil place and people will always make fun of u and hurt you.
Think like a wolf.
Think in the now.
Find your place in life.
Then find out how.
(Came up with this in 5 seconds so yeah it sux)
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Posted: Sun Jun 29, 2008 3:05 pm
jinxchan6306 OneXMuerte took my words sad oh well. Your poems do suck. Not trying 2 b mean uh...the wording is &*(#ed up and it makes you look Not depressed but u want 2 kill your self, And still being nice to those who r mean 2 u. Guess what? GET OVER IT life is a cruel evil place and people will always make fun of u and hurt you. Think like a wolf. Think in the now. Find your place in life. Then find out how. (Came up with this in 5 seconds so yeah it sux)Sorry to have taken the words from you but her explanation just pissed me off. And thank you for adding more on to what I said. ^_^
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Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 12:47 am
wow ok.....u guys r so nice, way to kick her when shes down stare
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Posted: Mon Jun 30, 2008 9:37 am
cutepunk_elly wow ok.....u guys r so nice, way to kick her when shes down stare Thank you! I try. If she cant handle mild criticism than she should go 2 a happy place. (crazy people hut) The world is a cold cruel place and she will b hurt and kicked when shes down. She put herself down so we can kick her. If someone else put her down i would help her
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Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 11:00 am
cutepunk_elly wow ok.....u guys r so nice, way to kick her when shes down stare Sugar coating things won't help and learn how to type.
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Posted: Wed Jul 02, 2008 8:45 am
Look at her full and bright.
Dark, Light, Day, Night
Feel the powers of the sea
pushing you, pulling me
Upon this should i hope to see
were there is love so will be
a shadow lurking beneath the light
hidden in darkness, enveloped in night
How come darkness is so bad
When the light can also make you sad
If pain is black like decay
Than love is white like the day
Enter the world of Magic,
Step threw the golden gate,
Forget everything tragic,
Come and seal your fate.
Explore the Dark forest,
Where time and houres dont pass,
Search the shadowed treetops,
Forget your lonesome past,
Sing with the joyful Elves,
Dance where the Demons meet,
Play with the mistiviouse Fairys,
Where monsters and creatures sleep.
Lady of Darkness
Lady of Light
Forever alone
Together you fight.
The Brightest night
The Darkest day
The Shadowed Moon
The sun that play.
Tears of sorrow,
Make it last,
End this now,
This hateful past.
I am open to hateful criticism and scorn blaugh
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Posted: Thu Jul 03, 2008 4:52 pm
 there wuz once wuz a cat and he wuz skinny and he wuz so hungry he became a skeletal ninny , after awhile he found a home , it wuz in an alley, a carboard box shaped like a dome . then he started catching rats and mice, he ate them 10 times a day , then he couldn't come home because he became lazy 24 hours a day . make it a lesson 2 all ur kids , don't starve ur kids or soon they won't even make it out 2 the front door but manage 2 make it to the kitchen and eat anything that doesn't have a lid .
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Posted: Fri Jul 04, 2008 5:56 am
Quote: there wuz once wuz a cat and he wuz skinny and he wuz so hungry he became a skeletal ninny , after awhile he found a home , it wuz in an alley, a carboard box shaped like a dome . then he started catching rats and mice, he ate them 10 times a day , then he couldn't come home because he became lazy 24 hours a day . make it a lesson 2 all ur kids , don't starve ur kids or soon they won't even make it out 2 the front door but manage 2 make it to the kitchen and eat anything that doesn't have a lid . What the hell is this? Please use proper grammar and punctuation. And that's nice.... rolleyes
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Posted: Tue Jul 08, 2008 8:32 am
i call it a nonsense poem but there is a grammarical way
of saying it but i don't know but my poem is sorta in the
same aspect of the book " Alice in Wonderland " where it
doesn't make sense like it's all nonsense i guess sweatdrop
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Posted: Sat Jul 12, 2008 10:48 pm
In The Dark
My mommy comes to tuck me in,
We say our prayers then they begin,
The monsters come from everywhere,
I close my eye's and hug my bear.
From the closets and under my bed,
My fear kicks in I start to dread,
They run around playing with toys,
Scaring little girls and boys.
Creeping, crawling all around,
Scaring all the kids in town,
Short ones, tall ones, fat ones too,
They really scare me when they say, "Boo."
But theres one little monster I like,
He's kind of shy I call him Mike,
He looks almost like a puppy,
I think he may be real lucky.
To find someone just like me,
To take care of him and not let him be,
I keep him safe and warm at night,
In the dark and the light.
"He's not there" says my mom and dad
They say thinking he is, is really bad,
So when I am ready to go to sleep
Mike and I never make a peep.
Poem By Me, Put in Two Separate Books
(I Entered It In Two Different Things)
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