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 Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 9:30 am
No I don't have a myspace page. I'm not one who likes myspace.
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Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 12:02 pm
Fires_Blaze No I don't have a myspace page. I'm not one who likes myspace.
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Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 12:27 pm
SOOO...it's only because I love codes and making backgrounds...
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 5:54 pm
Captain Yukio SOOO...it's only because I love codes and making backgrounds...
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 6:20 pm
I like them a lot... especially Dragon's Heart. The only suggestion I have (if you don't mind suggestions from a fellow poet) is that you try to make it flow more smoothly... The number of syllables per line and the rhythm of each line is kind of erratic right now, which makes it flow a little roughly when you read it.
(Trust me, I struggle with that all the time)
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Posted: Fri Aug 03, 2007 2:08 pm
I love the line "...trace their World with chalk" heart
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Posted: Thu Aug 23, 2007 9:14 am
Storm Waltz I love the line "...trace their World with chalk" heart
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Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 9:09 pm
ooh! i love "Eternal sleep" that' exaclt yhow i feel right now!
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Posted: Wed Nov 21, 2007 6:53 pm
these poems are nice and reflect the time you spent in reflecting on them. the poems all have their own unique ideas behind them. to me, the poems seem to lack variety in what has been shown here. i'd love to see poems from you with a different rhyme sheme, structure, or mood. they have that basic last word rhyme style AA, BB or -A-A,-B-B, and a somber or depressed mood to them. show me poems with variety.
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