Becoming of the world.

[Seelennacht]

I made this poem for an English Independent study class that I'm doing and I would love some feed back on it. Since no one ever comments or leaves and helpful advice on the class website -_-'

What is our world becoming?
Turning its back on its saviors.
Covering its eyes and telling lies

What is it our world is becoming?
Sending children out into the world
Like sending soldiers into war.
Hoping for their safe return.

What is it that our world is becoming?
Ignoring the pleas of its children
Declaring war on its brethren.

What is it our world is becoming?
Abandoning the weak
Shunning the Ill

What is it our world is becoming?
Becoming lost to the chaos
Engulfed by its greed.

My dear lost soul
I ask of you
What is it that our world is becoming?

 

[One Flew The Cuckoos Nest]

Very nice.