More poetry in need of criticism :p

[EndlesslyBroken]

Don't Give
Don't Try
this Life we Live
is just a big Lie
a Trick for the Dead
we aren't really here
it's all in your head
but don't Shed a Tear
for there is No Reason
No Point in going on
in this World full of Treason
so Give Up and Be Gone

 

[Seelennacht]

Very nice. It has a nice Rhyming scheme to it. A depressing subject though.  

[EndlesslyBroken]

endrancethetempress

Very nice. It has a nice Rhyming scheme to it. A depressing subject though.

Thank you, and yea most of my poems are either depressing or disturbing