Dance

[GhostlyMark]

hey im back with another one

Grass, standing tall and still,
stretching to the sun. Trees
bathed in the sunlight drew breath silently,
waiting.

A small river, stretched as far to
the horizon, carrying a family of fish;
Small jumps to uplift life. A wind would
pass but no response was heard.

From a distance, birds soaring in the sky
suddenly sink to the arms of the tree. They
release a song of sharp tweets that infatuate
the fishes. Circling through the air, a spray of water.

Another wind comes by and moves the stiff grass
to shift to the left. Then right. The tree's arms sway
left to right as if they are in a concert, losing their
leaves as they ride the wind to be diminished in
the light of the sun.

i dont think i did good since im very tired, but i leave that to the people who decides to judge my work  

[enchanting_queen]

mmmhhmm  

[GhostlyMark]

red_snowqueen

mmmhhmm

o.0 wanna elaborate on that?  

[enchanting_queen]

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

mmmhhmm

o.0 wanna elaborate on that?

i like your idea, just wished it flowed a little bit more.  

[GhostlyMark]

red_snowqueen

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

mmmhhmm

o.0 wanna elaborate on that?

i like your idea, just wished it flowed a little bit more.

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Although free verse requires no meter, rhyme, or other traditional poetic techniques, a poet can still use them to create some sense of structure. A clear example of this can be found in Walt Whitman's poems, where he repeats certain phrases and uses commas to create both a rhythm and structure.
Because of a lack of predetermined form, free verse poems have the potential to take truly unique shapes. The poet is given more license to express and, unrestrained by traditional bounds, has more control over the development of the poem. This could allow for a more spontaneous and essentially individualizing factor.

 

[enchanting_queen]

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

mmmhhmm

o.0 wanna elaborate on that?

i like your idea, just wished it flowed a little bit more.

Quote

Although free verse requires no meter, rhyme, or other traditional poetic techniques, a poet can still use them to create some sense of structure. A clear example of this can be found in Walt Whitman's poems, where he repeats certain phrases and uses commas to create both a rhythm and structure.
Because of a lack of predetermined form, free verse poems have the potential to take truly unique shapes. The poet is given more license to express and, unrestrained by traditional bounds, has more control over the development of the poem. This could allow for a more spontaneous and essentially individualizing factor.

I understand what u are trying to say.. its just an opnion i perfer. What u did was very nice though.  

[GhostlyMark]

red_snowqueen

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

GhostlyMark

red_snowqueen

mmmhhmm

o.0 wanna elaborate on that?

i like your idea, just wished it flowed a little bit more.

Quote

Although free verse requires no meter, rhyme, or other traditional poetic techniques, a poet can still use them to create some sense of structure. A clear example of this can be found in Walt Whitman's poems, where he repeats certain phrases and uses commas to create both a rhythm and structure.
Because of a lack of predetermined form, free verse poems have the potential to take truly unique shapes. The poet is given more license to express and, unrestrained by traditional bounds, has more control over the development of the poem. This could allow for a more spontaneous and essentially individualizing factor.

I understand what u are trying to say.. its just an opnion i perfer. What u did was very nice though.

im just happy for criticism